Counterpart

Counterpart

A Poem by Jaffa Forbes
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"Age Seventeen, burns a bonfire in Berlin." I was recently contacted by an unknown young man, who was looking for his long-lost brother with the same name as me. This is a poem that sprung from that incident. It is about mistakes and forgivenes

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Age Seventeen, burns
a bonfire in Berlin.
The spread and orange glow,
streaking through moonlight
flowing crowds as they gawp
and gasp.

Age Twelve and into the world
you delve, deranged and full
of comedic value; insistent to
take on the injustice of it all.
But the more you burn, fierce
and raging, the more you give,
and underneath that pierced heart,
the subtle undertones of blinding hurt
and a longing for this so called hope that
glows from your bubble girlfriend.

Age Ten, the world
throws you away;
my counterpart,
my namesake.

And somehow,
Eight years later,
your brother, 
Running miles and
miles to find you,
Is still searching,
And still wondering
where on earth
you ended up.

I can see you,
And you can see him,
And he can see you,
my counterpart.
I have your name,
But not your brother.

Age Nine and the world is full
of sorrow, a confused memory
and your dad is dead; he burned
himself out, and now so are you

Age Four and here am I again,
Loved but undeserved, surely
deserted, surely forgotten?

Here is the door, and I will
go through it.
Here is the light, and I am
held tight.

Aged now and bitter broken,
Here I am again, Eighteen
years older from the life giving
soldering iron that fused me
together, friend.

© 2008 Jaffa Forbes


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This is a wonderful concept and very well expressed - I am like how you count the ages back at first and then you begin counting forward which confused me a little although it seems you counting backwards for him and forwards for yourself although I may be mistaken. Otherwise, a wonderful read and an interesting situation to have found yourself in. Thank you.
Light,
Siddartha


Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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This was lovely, and fascinating. Especially the entire concept behind the piece. How exciting and yet strangely disheartening that would be. I love the way this poem played out, skeptical and wondering but still a little bit hopeful. It was an enjoyable read. Nicely done.

Posted 14 Years Ago


wow. what a bizarre incident. written very very well... emanating a sense of disconnected empathy for the person who confused you with a lost loved one.
nicely done.

k

Posted 15 Years Ago


very good thanks for shareing

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is a wonderful concept and very well expressed - I am like how you count the ages back at first and then you begin counting forward which confused me a little although it seems you counting backwards for him and forwards for yourself although I may be mistaken. Otherwise, a wonderful read and an interesting situation to have found yourself in. Thank you.
Light,
Siddartha


Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Jaffa Forbes
Jaffa Forbes

Canterbury, Kent, United Kingdom



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Jaffa Forbes is the bored business student of Canterbury, UK. He is a writer of all things, but mainly poetry and novellas, not to mention the odd satire article. He is fond of speaking about him.. more..

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