DO NOT DUPLICATE

DO NOT DUPLICATE

A Poem by Phoenix
"

If Mt.Olympus were a skyscraper, and all the gods sat in office cubicles monitoring the mortals, this is what my computer program would be flashing...

"

DO NOT DUPLICATE

she was way too late

 

 

 

DO NOT DUPLICATE

she wasn't really worth the wait

 

 

 

DO NOT DUPLICATE

she can't even catch the bait

 

 

 

DO NOT DUPLICATE

she'll never change state

 

 

 

DO NOT DUPLICATE

 she's not anyone's fate

 

 

 

DO NOT DUPLICATE

 she's someone you should hate

 

 

 

DO NOT DUPLICATE

 you needed a key to open the gate

 

 

 

DO NOT DUPLICATE

but there's only one, there is no mate -

 

 

 

SYSTEM FAILURE

she failed...

 

 

 

WARNING: OBJECT NOT FOUND

...and it was lost.

 

 

 

SHUT DOWN  []

RESTART    []

STAND BY   []

 

 

 

 

© 2009 Phoenix


Author's Note

Phoenix
So yeah......I wrote this when I was extremely tired, almost to the point of delerium.... Its meant to be like a computer screen flashing a message over and over.
This describes a big personal failure in my life... and it pretty much is saying that, if I were made from a computer program, there would be warnings not to use the program anymore, dont duplicate it in any way because the system has fatal flaws...

And I kept clicking the RESART button, but there was no response. So I am currently on STANDBY.

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This is intriguing. I like the style/format. It's something I haven't seen before, which is always the mark of good poetry. I totally got the computer thing, but your author's note helped me understand more. And, by the way, I know the feeling.
Just a one things:
1) In the line, 'she'll never change state' it would sound better if you said 'she'll never change HER state' (that's assuming, of course, that this is free verse without any syllable count, just rhyme)
All in all, a great poem!!!

Posted 14 Years Ago


What an ingenious poem! It is unique and different. I like it!

Posted 15 Years Ago



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Added on April 20, 2009
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Phoenix

Zushi, Japan



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