Tanka Poem 3

Composed in the style of Japanese Tanka. It takes the form of five lines and a syllabic meter of 5-7-5-7-7.

Alas! I unlike

These autumnal leaves,

Passions inflamed,

Your embers glow oh so bright.

My heart grows colder in pain. 

Author's Note

My work takes inspiration from the poetess Ono no Komachi, whose writings tend to flirt with themes concerning sorrow, loss, and unrequited love.

Reviews

[John Alexander McFadyen]

This has a deep feeling of pain and loss but I found the stitching undone perhaps in the transition between the protagonists comparison of himself to the autumn leaves and to his love?