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A Poem by J

                 
 
 
and if it were that easy
i'd give you a postcard scrawled with indian ink
which says everything needed to be known
in a heartbeat washed in cyan and magenta
and a dab of sunflower
yellow
the colour of home
and well-wishes before confetti is thrown
off one of those sparkling ocean liners
destined for some hard to pronounce grecian port
"where are you now? between days spent fishing
and diving in the seychelles
comfortably unaware
of the thousands displaced
by the latest numbing
headline?"
where are we now is a fitting entry to a novel
you say i'm meant to write describing moments of insanity
and devotion and happiness found in some future world
where owning all five senses would be a gift and not a promise
where not everything would be divided into three square meals
of clasped hands offering prayers
to the unknown yet slightly believable notion
that is god in whatever form your mind and origin dictates
to be the history of you and your family
caught between faith and the obvious
between premonitions and the avoidable
logic
of home.

© 2009 J



Author's Note

J
Went a bit nuts with the delay on the mic... whoops. Was fun to play around with, though.

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My only complaint would be with the one and two word lines; assuming it's not a formatting issue, I don't see where they serve a particular function or purpose. That being said, there is much to like about the piece. The images are vivid and well-conceived, and the meter gives it an almost lyrical feel. Very fine piece of work.

Posted 8 Years Ago


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LJW
Ok...well, I came back to let you know I had my tubes tied and I have no lower body, so no worries. :-)

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LJW
I want to have your children. :-)

Good god man, this rocks.

Posted 8 Years Ago


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oo you scary m**********r I love that, It makes me want to write and record again, best compliment eh? mainline inspiration. What recorder do you use to put it here and what mix program? Could you tell me? I really need to get excited about something again.

its still resonating, ooooo

Posted 8 Years Ago


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I don't know what to say J, I read this before there was audio and thought it was nice and agreeable, now, I cant say its lost that first appeal but I can add it seems spooky now. Thats all. Oh and I always liked spooky.

Posted 8 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

My only complaint would be with the one and two word lines; assuming it's not a formatting issue, I don't see where they serve a particular function or purpose. That being said, there is much to like about the piece. The images are vivid and well-conceived, and the meter gives it an almost lyrical feel. Very fine piece of work.

Posted 8 Years Ago


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is this the one you sent me the link to on that site? I tried to leave a comment, not sure if it took or not though. . . always brilliant. Your words are so colorful, I hear them rise off the page even without evoca. bits of broken conversation, and come to think of it, that may be why I enjoy your writing so much . . .

thanks for posting this here.

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