Morphing Memories

A Blink in time
And then you were gone
Drifting in the polluted scents of yesterday
Distorted by the rotation of the lens
Until the essence of you 
Has morphed into a dream
Plucked from reality
By the gnarled fingers of Psyche
The artist
Never satisfied with the form of Cupid
searching for perfection 
In sticky earth
Unable to throw it into the fire
To be hardened to its fate
Where it becomes a fragile thing of beauty
Until a slip of the hand
Blink
You are gone

Reviews

[BougaTimeBongo]

I love this, so powerful in its imagery. I especially love "Plucked from reality/By the gnarled fingers of Psyche". I also love that you bring the whole thing back around at the end, but in a simpler way, as though the poem is breaking down much like I imagine the relationship alluded to, has. Lovely.

[JayceeC]

Did the lack of punctuation hinder understanding or flow as you read? or would a Strophe break after Psyche help the reader?

[BougaTimeBongo]

Not at all for me, but I do like minimalist punctuation. I think the only places that perhaps any trouble might be had in its reading "By the gnarled fingers of Psyche/The artist". I think it would be appropriate to put a single period in the entire thing, right after Psyche. That is the only punctuation that I would use, personally.

[JayceeC]

Thanks...will look at it with period vs line break there

[BougaTimeBongo]

Happy to share my thoughts!

[B. Boileau]

What a great subject ! For me, it discribes what happens when I have the beginnings of a piece and I don't write it down, in a blink, it's gone ! But really, this is much more than that. The images here could easily make the reader imagine all kinds of metaphrical scenarios. And that's what I like best about this refreshing piece.

[E G TEN]

Damn" and I thought I read them all, this is finely crafted with ease and your words are well indented, "never satisfied with the form of Cupid searching for perfection" that's like "Mariana's Trench" deep ;) thanks for Sharing! ;)

[JayceeC]

EG: You will find my new friend that my favorite part of poetry is looking for the new. New ways to express and describe things that are common for many. Deep thinking, yes, my brain is always moving, always looking for connections. Thank you for dropping by to review.

[Shubham Joshi]

This is such a unique poem and written on a topic and with a style that I have never read before. IT's a beautiful poem.

[JayceeC]

Thanks you taking the time to read and review.

[William Nassar]

As if you are talking about me :-) ... However, I am still here :)
I love it ..
You should visit Cupids ..

[JayceeC]

Well you did make a quick exit. Will be by..have read a few but not responded yet.

[SuspectGray]

My memories are often distorted by the rotation of the lens...especially when the lens points at me. Nice write....enjoyed. ( : O )

[JayceeC]

Well some people distort more than others. {;-D)