Lachrymosity

My interpretation of the life of a tear.

Born an overwhelming swell of liquid-hot emotion,
 She nears the edge swiftly, contemplating the end.
Stilling, cooling, swaying, daring--
Closer, closer, closer she stumbles.
She falls.
Down, down, down a rose-round cheek.
Flaunting her trail like a falling star.
Reaching the end of her journey,
A humble conclusion to a tumultuous beginning,
She sways,
As she prays, prays, prays--
For a better life, and longer days,
Bids her sisters a happier stay,
And falls, for one last time.

Reviews

[Wildfleour]

I like how you personified a tear.

I think the last line creates a break in your "flow", but this is just my opinion.

[Brett Campaigne]

You capture the essence of the moment, but it is the reflection of the tear and just a taste of its composition

[Ambassidor in Chains]

Thats really cool! I couldn't actually get anything out of it. Until I read the description hahaha. It's really good and really interesting! I loved it :D

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Wonderful observation Raye and the thought of writing about a tear is a novel idea, at least I have never seen a poem about a teardrop and its journey. Very insightful and different, beautiful flow and easy reading...
I loved it! Good girl...
Helen :-))

[emmajoy]

What a beautiful way of describing a tear.. crying. Your poem is inventive and, very sensitively created.

Thank you for sharing your highly imaginative and finely formatted post.

[lady o]

wonderful wonderful heart-felt piece. I enjoyed this muchly!!!!

[Kaleidoscope Apocalypse]

Wow.. I loved this piece. It was short, but it was packed with emotions and it was a great way to tell this story.

Wonderful write, my dear.

[Brandon]

Very nice job on this piece. It was well written.

[Patient Poet (Yos)]

Thats so wonderful, you are so sensative Thanks
Yossi

[Treasaigh (The Solitar..]

Marvelous concept! I'll never look at a tear the same way=)Beautiful imagery. Lovely flow of words.
Crafted together so creatively. Brilliant write..I love it=)