Charlatan

Poem about the inner struggle of grief.

Fake!
Can't you see?
Oh, for goodness sake!
This isn't really me
But its easier to say
"Yes. I'm fine, thank you."
As I stitch myself together with better memories
"No. I'll be ok."

Liar!
Charlatan!
I wear a great mask
You look at me and see me
I see my reflection, I'm unrecognizable
Tragedy is funny that way
Who is that gnarled creature?
Wait.... She has my eyes

Pretender!
" Really, I'm perfectly fine."
Well, until you see my heart
That is why I keep it in a chest
No not my chest, his
But he has little use for it now
Remember the tragedy?
Its easier to be heartless
Rather than see your pity
I don't need the reminder
Pain is my reminder
And grief is my company
Although he is not my guest he makes himself at home here...

Reviews

[SmittyJas]

Looking into ones past and making it last could be the theme of this poem a learning to love and a moving on.

[78Jon]

The poem has a good theme. I can tell it's about putting on the "front" for other people. I've always recognized poetry to have a decent rhyme scheme, so I don't really know how to critique poetry.

[Jessalynn]

Thanks for your comment. This poem I purposely wanted it to be choppy and discontected bouncing back and fourth. there wasnt a lot of rhyme to it so maybe it would be conc
idered free write instead.

[78Jon]

Possibly. Again, I don't know much about poetry so I'm not the one to critique poetry that I don't know anything about. I know there's different styles of poetry, in which some poems rhyme and some don't. Sort of like surgery and surgeons, there's all different types of specific surgery, though it's all under one big "surgery" title.

[Tatay]

I like how you write, you know how to catch reader feeling.

[Jessalynn]

Thank you very much :)

[James Reynolds]

This is without rhyme which will be taken more seriously by real poets...rhyming is for greeting cards and country western songs imo...I mention that in my blog....www.secularexplorer.blogspot.com
James