One shining night

Prose thoughts!

As the night passes by, the coldness tickles in the breathing air. She stares at the darkened sky, which adds the meaning to the beauty of countless twinkling stars, sitting on the lawn. The wishing star gives hope to all her dreams and there is an immense calmness speaking within her. The hours move on untouched, suddenly her son tugged her sleeve to grab her attention. “Will you get me that mom?” asks her son pointing at the moon. She watches her son‘s eyes now shining brilliantly with mischief and the traces of million star’s brightness fades away. She gets up and walks away, taking her son along with her. Within a few steps, they reach the place. She kneels down and takes the reflection of the moon on the pond water in her hands carefully and gives it her son, mesmerizing her son’s smile.

Reviews

[613]

This is so beautiful. This seems like something I would do with a future child of mine. (: Haha.

You do, however, seem to have a bunch of punctuational errors - mostly including the use of commas. (I've struggled with this as well; it's quite common).

Overall, well done! It was a very visual piece & I saw it all.

- Brittney

[Jeyanthi]

Thanks for liking my idea. :D

Yeah, am not a friend of proper grammar, but i will go through once again. :P

[613]

You're welcome! :D

[Rajat malik]

This piece is the best.... I loved it:))
Mom- the best thing of our life which has ever happened with everyone.....

[Jeyanthi]

Hey... thanks ya... :)

[Rajat malik]

You are welcome :) Cutie pie