Stormy weather

Stormy weather leave it be

For haven't you done enough to me

The one I love left me alone

For what sins must I atone

Drops of red fall from the sky

After loosing all water from my eyes

Leave me alone you wretched pain

The storm of myself ceaselessly rains

Reviews

[Beth Winter]

This reads as a heartfelt plea. It is sorrowfully beautiful. Losing should have only one o. I noticed that your natural rhythm is close to following meter although it shifts from iambic to trochaic at times. I wonder to myself what would happen if the meter were consistent throughout. Just me rambling, it doesn't fault your writing in any way. I love your capturing of the depth of sorrow.

[FallenWingz]

Hi John, nice seeing you here....
On with my review...as always your poetry holds strong emotions of pain and love lost in this one, i can somewhat relate to the dilema in this poem....sometimes it feels like the storms just dnt wanna clear and u keep asking urself when, but until u let it go....cos we tend to hold so long and tight to that one who left, that we put ourselves in that storm...eventually that rain will stop.

FallenWingz

[-abc-]

great rhyming, allegory and powerful emotional appeal. Well written dear poet. *rose*

[Michaelb2005]

I can relate to this. Especially last summer, what a horrible time, and I tried not to show how much rain was falling, and everyone trying to fix it for me. This I can totally relate to and completely feel. Good poem.

[FamaSemperVivat]

Wow, but I can't say it's going to cheer up an AP who's feeling like they've lost a friend. But we're here together now, so I guess we've found a new home, huh?

Hope that's true and we see less dreary writes in the future.

[Amera]

Sad but beautifully composed. The metaphor is wonderful, original and inspiring. Well done!

Love,
Amera