Solitude

 

Solitude

 

Here I am in my uninhabited room

Staring at the wall

Waiting for a call

 

Hanging on that chair

Alone I am no one is there

 

Here I am having no companion remote of others

No one to hear my fall

No one watches as I drain my soul

 

Unfrequented, lacking support of others

Abandoned, deserted and isolated

 

Wondering what shall I do

Why am I living this life of solitude

 

Why awake am I all the night

Why have I forsaken the light

 

What have become to the child inside

Where did that joy go why  love has died

 

Am I building a guard perhaps four walls

Rag is my heart, but who would count the wholes

 

Why lonesome, solitude , or isolation , regardless the name

What have I done wrong when did I lose the game

 

Why again came that dawn

When I became by myself and alone

Reviews

[GBU POETRY ONLY]

"Solitude" perfectly demonstrates the feeling of loneliness, isolation
and self doubt. But as some say, soltitude is part of a great artist's
way of life. I know it gives me time to re-evaluate inner thoughts &
feelings through poetry and such ... But, again, a social outlet is
a necessity... Sorry for the ambiguous review.
Thanks for sharing your private thoughts.
GBU

[Ruth]

Sometimes solitude is baffling but then again can be enlightening also, beautifully written love, I can really feel this one! xoxo

[olla]

when the heart speaks the soul listens.. this is very good..

[The Winter Grey]

It is clear you possess a powerful knack for description, as much of the imagery still lingers as I write this... I know how it feels to stand in that very room, and can attest to the desperation and quiet urgency portrayed in this piece. There are a couple of instance where the wording feels a bit scrambled, but lines like those of the poignant and punishing closing stanza, "Why again came that dawn / When I became myself and alone," they are entirely excusable. Terrific job.

[bookworm]

Ok, these two lines floored me:

"No one watches as I drain my soul" and

"Rag is my heart, but who would count the wholes"

those are mind numbing and brilliant...I thoroughly enjoy your honesty and the way you just kind of lay the words in our lap. Some of your phrasing is very unique and there is a world of profundity in them. Keep it up...really nice...

[SilentDreamer]

Yes! Perfect. Great flow, great writing. No doubt about it. Keep it up! Please. This site could use a lot more creative writers.

[Dark Angel]

Again I realize how much we write alike. You just use more creative measures and can draw more people in. This feeling I know too well, and I have no idea why I am this way. This poem expresses the loneliness and the unkown very well.

[A.A.Romanczuk]

Perfect depiction of loneliness and despondency! Touching in that it is full of the questions one asks when in this type of state..

[Moonflower]

This is a topic I find myself using repetitively, I think its just a part of being a poet or a writer in general, we are lonely souls. Beautiful write, dear~

[Coyote Poetry]

Easy to fall into darkness. When my two brother died in 1989-1990. I went into a cave and took time to come back alive. Wasn't for my writing and my will to go forward. I don't know if i would be alive today. A very sad and strong poem. We can be surrounded by s**t. Sometime we must find the flower in the sand. A outstanding poem.
Coyote