To Let Go

Personal betrayal

We can see what you have become

Needless to calculate a final sum

The tragic cause some may ponder

Till they think of something fonder

And yet there are those who exist

Can not cease holding what they miss

Our grip has desperately tightened

Maybe the darkness has brightened

The time to let go

Can't stop us, no

Your choice has an enviable clarity

Predicated by greed and sick sincerity

You will dance through these dead lives

Supplying your menacing hunger with fives

With dormant reason

Devastating treason

I now naively beg the question

I hope for an honest confession

Author's Note

Is it clear that addiction is present?

Reviews

[Rene Salinas]

Consonance and dissonance, it might be something that you are fairly used to . Musical forms as well in where the symmetry of Melody, Harmony and rhtythm and time gets rigidly or loosely arranged for the sake of expression. This writing has a dissonant theme yet a consonant way to express it. Rhyme allusions will always create a bridge of friendship amongst writer and reader. However it also confines the writing precisely becuase is masks the theme. Here is where the association to a musical score can help as i read I think it would have been helpful to add punctuation as it would have lighten the meaning and emphasize that the theme is not superflous quite the contrary. It would have also add silence pauses where needed and accentuation as well.

As for the honest confession, a tough dramatic moment.

Thankyou

[Klo Willow]

Thank you for your time, and your deft connection to musical theory along with other elements. It is a delight for me to see that my reader's interpretation (especially when it matches mine!), as well as note the more subtle things such as structure. Your recommendations are just, and I will certainly utilize punctuation in this piece! I also must add that your review is beautifully written.

I look forward to reviewing your work as well.

Thank you once again.