Praying

Quietly she lays in bed.
Praying to escape the world.
Praying for the pain to go away.
Praying when she wakes up she won't get hurt.
Praying she will find someone that cares about her.
Praying she will not cry her heart out.
Praying she will find her lost soul agian.
Praying she could make it threw another day.
Praying she will smile agian.
praying her heart with unfreeze.
Praying someone will hold her.
Praying someone will get rid of her tears.
Praying she will wake up in the morning.
But she won't...

Reviews

[Mauricio Montoya]

sad piece, but nice work

[?]

Well done in expressing your emotions
so sad though

[Zane]

"Praying her heart with unfreeze" - Praying her heart will unfreeze

Maybe "Praying someone will get rid of her tears" - Praying someone will rid her of her tears

Other than that, good job. I always enjoy reading your work.

[Jonathan De Elvira]

urm...
I don't know what else to say for this one but...
I think I'm in love with this piece...
Well done love.

[Caitlynxoxo]

oh man the first line was really well written; it made the pace for the rest of the beautiful poem. I loved the repetitive "Praying", followed by either "someone" or "she". It really...gosh i dont even know how to explain it. I think using those two words back and forth gave the reader two points of views, practically :) thanks for sharing

xoxo Caitlyn xoxo

[Raven]

I find it sad, yet it draws me in to read. I like it ^^

[nono]

I like it your on a roll with writing these poems aren't you? I like it nice job trying to escape the world with a pray like my "That's why I'm wishing poem" I like this much better than mine though keep it up!