The Suicide of Raindrops

The Suicide of Raindrops

A Poem by Legion

The Suicide of Raindrops


The suicide of raindrops
Upon my car's windshield
Reminds me
About the brevity of life
And the reality
That I have to pee.

Legion
13APR15

© 2016 Legion



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One finely wrought piece. One great metaphor about life's fleeting nature done in biting off the cuff humor. An outstanding piece of short poetry...

The only suggestion I would make is each beginning word on each line does not need to be capitalized even if you do or do not use punctuation in your poetry.

I forgot how many fine and excellent poets are on this site -you being at the top of the list. I was happy to see you still banging away on these boards.

my warmest
bob

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Nothing worse than seeing, hearing running water when the bladders full. Not to bad for a fellow, just flop it out and go, but a woman, well, all sorts of complications unless knickerless with no footwear and a handful of tissue...bless you

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Loved this piece. I like the simplicity of our writing that still provokes thought

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

One finely wrought piece. One great metaphor about life's fleeting nature done in biting off the cuff humor. An outstanding piece of short poetry...

The only suggestion I would make is each beginning word on each line does not need to be capitalized even if you do or do not use punctuation in your poetry.

I forgot how many fine and excellent poets are on this site -you being at the top of the list. I was happy to see you still banging away on these boards.

my warmest
bob

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love how you alienate the readers through comedy, making it so rather than thinking about the comment you had just made, they can distance themselves from it. This was a great read!

Posted 1 Year Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Beautifully composed. Poetic, funny, striking all in the same time and expressed in so few words. Beautiful!

Great read.

Best,
~KA~

Posted 1 Year Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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I write about various topics. Mostly I write poetry/songs. I took my screen name from a concept album/epic poem I wrote years ago titled "Legion's Legacy: Tales of the Damned" which was inspired by .. more..

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