The Suicide of Raindrops

The Suicide of Raindrops


The suicide of raindrops
Upon my car's windshield
Reminds me
About the brevity of life
And the reality
That I have to pee.

Legion
13APR15

Reviews

[Robert Francis Callaci]

One finely wrought piece. One great metaphor about life's fleeting nature done in biting off the cuff humor. An outstanding piece of short poetry...

The only suggestion I would make is each beginning word on each line does not need to be capitalized even if you do or do not use punctuation in your poetry.

I forgot how many fine and excellent poets are on this site -you being at the top of the list. I was happy to see you still banging away on these boards.

my warmest
bob

[Gee]

Nothing worse than seeing, hearing running water when the bladders full. Not to bad for a fellow, just flop it out and go, but a woman, well, all sorts of complications unless knickerless with no footwear and a handful of tissue...bless you

[mae23]

Loved this piece. I like the simplicity of our writing that still provokes thought

[Heather]

I love how you alienate the readers through comedy, making it so rather than thinking about the comment you had just made, they can distance themselves from it. This was a great read!

[Kevin Andros]

Beautifully composed. Poetic, funny, striking all in the same time and expressed in so few words. Beautiful!

Great read.

Best,
~KA~