The Castle I Will Build

What we can make

Each stone I place,
I remember something new,
Like the way you would smile,
The way you said we were through,

And each stone I place,
My love it grows stronger,
And I know for certain,
My heart would never wander,

This castle I'll build,
Reaching the sky,
All for you,
If you come back to my side,

My hard labour,
You may never see,
But knowing is the half,
That I choose to be,

So if ever you do,
Check up on me,
See my progress,
See the new me,

Because the moment you left,
You said your goodbyes,
I knew you were right,
you shouldn't of left my side,

The rights I can wrong,
The wrongs I can write,
And sooner or later,
You may realize,

Here I am,
Building this castle for you,
Maybe one day,
You'll return and we will start anew,

Your brand new castle,
Built out of love,
Out of heartache, rejection,
Every emotion above,

So if ever you decide,
To come and see me,
You'll see what instead,
I chose to be,

If ever you want,
If ever you need,
Please oh my love,
Come back to me.

Reviews

[Nigel Newman]

I'm tempted to say this is a vain hope. But actually that's not really the point. Perhaps they will indeed see you from a distance and observe that you really have changed - far better validation than endless entreaties from you direct. But even if that never happens, the act of true contrition has very probably made the 'me' in the poem a better person.

Couple of typos, probably classic auto-spell
- shouldn't of left my side (shouldn't have ...)
- the wrongs I can write (you probably mean right?)

Nice work!
Nigel

[LukewarmLollipop]

Thanks so much for the feedback!! I really appreciate it. Yes, the "of" should be "have", that one always gets me. However the second one indeed is supposed to be "write". Thanks again!

[Nigel Newman]

I did wonder about the 'write'. OK cheers.

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

That ache and longing for the one that you love is a cloud that lingers for years. They remain a part of you no matter the distance, and the heart always remembers and never forgets. You have expressed this beautifully. Excellent!