Blood Lust

Running from the Creature of the Night as I fight for my life.

She chases me ever so vigorously like a lion after his prey.

Darkness surrounds me and consumes every last shred of light.

No matter what I do I cannot escape the imminent blight.

As she approaches she screams so fiercely as if a thousand

Souls were dying to get out of their wretched cages.

 

 

I pant *Peh Peh Peh* and gasp for air as my lungs fill with

The mist around thee. The dew of the midnight London

Fog is upon me, but then again, so is she. Her onyx hair

Finally settles on her rounded shoulders and her eyes are filled

With lust; red and hungry for blood. As she looms toward me my

Heart beats like thunder *Baboom Baboom Baboom*. Too tired

To run my will is torn asunder, and too frightened to resist I freeze

Like a casualty of Medusa. I’m a victim of the Gorgon’s Gaze.

 

 

As I stand still like a petrified statue she draws ever so closer

To me with a vicious look. Fangs extended she shoves me against

The wall, my head becomes fuzzy and I fall to the ground. She hops

On top of me and sinks her claws into my back as her teeth dig into

My neck. I couldn’t scream if I wanted to and yet the pain subsides.

Her moans are of lust and anguish, yet she continues to feed.

 

 

The liquid crimson slowly flows down my side, but she doesn’t let   

Any go to waste. She craves it like a junkie craves his fix, but only if

It’s pure and I am. “Virgin blood tastes like nectar” she says while I

Lay on the cold, damp cobblestone of the alley. Her strength overpowers

Me as if I was shackled by Hades himself and yet I feel drawn to her.

She smiles, licks her lips clean of blood, and whispers to me, “You

Will never be free, free, free.” It would seem this was meant to be.

Reviews

[Davidgeo]

2nd line... contradicting genders... "she" .... after "his" prey?

It's actually not too shabby. In an absurd way...

For the same reasons I love Evil Dead 1 I have to admit, you have potential.

If you add a little more eloquence in a cleverly cunty way you might have something lovely.

[Guardian Of The Lost]

Ah. I was thinking lions are males, so as it stands it makes sense, but perhaps I can change it to "lioness" and it would work better.

[Davidgeo]

As you like it should be just fine. That gender thing at the beginning really was the only off thing to me. Usually I don't say anything.

[Davidgeo]

I genuinely like this one though....

[Davidgeo]

the base of it anyway

[Guardian Of The Lost]

Haha. Thank you. I always welcome constructive criticism. Without that we cannot grow.

[Davidgeo]

"you can't grow without burning" Arnold

[Davidgeo]

I wouldn't comment if I didn't think you were good.