Control

Submission: so sweet

Fear takes hold of me in a vise-like grip,

Air is stolen from my lungs; precious bubbles of oxygen,

My heart beats violently against my rib cage,

Why fight to live, when submission to death is bliss?

This pain is real, it’s tangible,

I can almost reach out and touch this Angel of Death,

Bright white spots blur my vision,

My sanity slips little by little.

Weakness? No. This control gives me strength,

Just the fact that I hold precious life in the palm of my hands,

And that with a flick of my fingers I can take it,

Control, Power, Strength�"

Author's Note

Submission: so sweet

Reviews

[ANTO]

Thats a good starting point. Controlling your own destiny by your own hands does provide a platform from which we can build. First we choose to wrest control of our own life from the grip of this Angel of Death then we can choose to change something of the way we live as a next step - each time strengthening the decision-making muscles and making further positive changes - each time the Angel of Death is thrust further into the distance - further out of our sphere of influence.
Your writing is deep and thought inducing Niyia.

[Ink Seductress]

thank you, your eye-opening reviews are always welcomed Anto :)

[ANTO]

My pleasure - always good to see you - I hope you're well my friend??

[Ink Seductress]

Yews, i'm great!! :)

[Leon C]

An excellent exploration of the nature of power. On the edge of life you have total control and power. Love the sensation of life ebbing away leaving the choice in your own hands

Being picky, I spotted a typo in the first line. - sorry. vice not vise.

Lovely piece of work.

[Ink Seductress]

Um, that is not a typo. Im not referring to an addiction or a a habit which is what 'vice' means, im referring to just a very strong or tight hold on something which is what 'vise' means. Thank you for your review though :)

[Leon C]

Sorry I stand corrected. I was kind of surprised that it had slipped past you since the quality of the rest of the work was so high. :-)

[AaronFreitas]

Very nice write! I always enjoy the way you write and the thoughts you put on paper. Good work with this one :)