19:13

Wind chimes from another world.

Not in this realm, and yet 

Have more impact. Touch the leaves 

Above us with music, they 

Shudder in pleasure. 

They are a kindred spirit to us.

Summer green tastes like

A blade on my lips. It won’t cut me.

But you will, soon. 

Candy-sweet on your tongue is

A myriad of magnolia.

So close the blood-beat heat 

Tingles my skin, and makes me believe.

You count dots on my petal-pink top.

Few hundred on my tummy. 

Four hundred on my heart. 

The weight is too heavy there.

You can release it but

Your earth eyes search beyond me. 

Do they simmer in thought

Or do they escape?

The town clock goes and now

It’s time to leave.

Summers will fold into autumns

That blow into winters. 

As sure a cycle as you and I. 

We begin, seem to never end.

Sometimes, warmth will kiss you.

It sears my mouth. And no snow

Will come to cool the ache. 

I am the daffodil. And you are 

My flowering quince. 

Blossoming unseen by the other. 

You may flourish in soft ice,

But I come alive in the blaze. 

We contrast, but not in beauty.

We contrast, and will never be the same.

Reviews

[Plagued Monumentally]

Sometimes love can be very cyclic with feeling wise. Someone thats 17 is sure beyond her years. You write like a person who's seen the world, seen everything and experienced everything. I really, really like that. Also, each stanza drew me in deeper and deeper, and I really wish it was a little longer so I didn't have to come back to reality. I've been in that situation before, when I love someone but they don't love me back, but when they love me I don't love them. I've never really understood the whole human love nature stuff. But this was filled with beauty and imagery that I had to re-read it again to get over my initial shock. And I'm not just saying that, I'm saying it because it was seriously beautiful.

[the penumbra]

I absolutely adore this. The line 'we contrast, but not in beauty,' just gets me for some reason. It speaks to me, I can feel it.
All your poetry from what I can see is very lovely. You have emotion in them, a distanced one. You poetry also always seems to have a sci-fi feel to it, haha.

[THE MAKER OF BUBBLES]

cod's wallop, really a great pile of it. Could do better

[Kachme]

love it! the way you use your words is awesome. emotion is definitely there. bravo!

[MmeCorpse]

Jaw hits floor.

It's absolutely wonderful. Very, very well-written. Achingly beautiful, vivid imagery.

Well done. Favoring.

[Dove]

woaahhh this is a very powerful piece. This is beautifully written.

[halflives]

Great poem. It worked very well. Powerful, yet to the point. Great job, I love ghost stories!

[Tkess]

I like the imagery you use in this poem.Very nice write. Very bittersweet.

[~Anita Sandlin~]

Wow! A very powerful write...good job

[tenkyu]

wonderful, i admire the rhyming and the way you arranged and choose your words, very engaging, the love of two people separated by time, this explains why love is so enigmatic, a bittersweet poem of love defying time and logic, reminds me of 'il mare' and 'the lake house'