I Carve Out My Heart

I carve out my heart.

I carve out my heart, tear it from my chest
And offer it to you from sinner’s hands
That you may kiss it moist with blood red lips
And tend to its deep mortal wounds;
That you may caress it wet between your thighs
To heal the scars that savage beings made
And pump it full of life to make it beat again.

07/07/10

Reviews

[amarlaksh]

So raw. beautiful.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Lovely review Amar. My many thank yous.

[X]

Wow. Could not be more dead on for what I crave from love from a woman. This is simply stated, perfect to describe any situation of heartache. Love it.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you, thank you, thank you X once again!

[SHEEMA HUQ]

warning: not to be recited over a hearty meal!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Ooops sorry Sheema!

[Leslie Philibert]

Like this, John uses a more traditional verse form me and romantic imagery. Good one.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Hi Leslie, I use no form. I have no understanding of poetic form and simply write from my soul. many thanks.

[Kajal Gulabani]

Carves an eternal depth of love n submission... Nice !

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks

[LA Lorena]

A carefully selected choice of words, deliberate and effective in dual meaning. Very nice John. You do evoke sensuality even in your pain. I'm liking this one immensely!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you It felt that way when I wrote it.

[DIVYA]

Wow wow wow! What an offer!!! Anyone would take it up immediately. This is just one of your best ever! My favourite.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you, thank you, thank you Divya!

[quinfinn]

i agree with the changeful storm...the depth and the metaphor are incredible. this write has a life of its own.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Quin. Sorry for the deluge of work but I was yesterday accused of only writing erotic stuff.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

a very deep poem, the use of metaphors is fantastic.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Neva

[Falling Leaf.]

Wow, so beautiful and soft. I wish I could write something like this. Very exquistely penned.

Adieu!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

But you do write exquisitie stuff.

[Falling Leaf.]

I'm an okay storyteller. But I feel that when I try to write something short with a big punch, I feel like I've jumbled a bunch of words together that don't make any sense.