If

If

A Poem by Chloe..Across the Universe

Should  I kiss your lips
Just the corner of your mouth
Where the honey drips - 
I wonder if  
I would speak your language

Your eyes soft and warm 
Just a tiny glint of devilishness
If I could kiss your eyelids
Softly so softly 
Could I see what you see 

Should I be able to nibble
Your earlobes partially covered
By your beautiful hair
Would I hear what you hear
With heartbeats

I wonder if I could
Kiss you, taste your soul
See myself through your eyes
Hear my heartbeats with yours
If I could would I like the me you see











© 2011 Chloe..Across the Universe


Author's Note

Chloe..Across the Universe
Quick quack of a write -

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a longing to taste what is perceived and received in the mind and hearing mechanisms...through the digestive tract - interesting angle

Posted 12 Years Ago


your writing has such SOUL to it!!! I can feel it!! GREAT WRITE!!!

Posted 12 Years Ago


I love the play of words here, everything just flows and the last line was a bit tricky Lol. But I really enjoyed reading, such a sweet, romantic mood is created, I love the intensity. Also I love the repetition of 'if', it makes it unique how you use it freely all over. Great jobb :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


"If I could, would I like the me you see?" Perfect ending to sensual and dramatic write. These words spilled from your soul with a cadence that shines with the hope of shared love. So genuine and sweet. I really love it.
100/100

Posted 12 Years Ago


I need to get a bit of that Quick quack! Your words convey a love that can not be put in a box.
You radiate a love of depth, and truth within words shared from your beautiful soul.
You always have had such a unique way of giving amazing visuals!
"hear with heartbeats"
The whole prose is wonderful. I feel the last stanza as well at times. Lovely, just as you are! ~ Jude :-)

Posted 12 Years Ago


I like it!It is deep and wonderfull and it makes me want to read more!Great job! :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


If this be a quick quack, I should like to see the full duck of a pen's kiss! This was amazing Chloe! It was deep and pulsing with imagination and hidden desires. It brought thought into the age old mirror question, but in an original and new way. Stellar Ink!

Aaron

Hope you have a great weekend too!

Posted 12 Years Ago


This is one of those deeply soulful pieces the stretches beyond the word love into a feeling that doesn't have one word to describe it. I love the whole I idea of this poem and the last stanza is magnificent.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Chloe, I cant believe how easily I seemed to step right into your soul. Most poems are from a spectator's point of view, but this is an experience that we are a part of. The emotions of this poem are pure magic.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Looking through reviews, as I like doing .. so many FINE writers and real friends have left this Writers Cafe,

Posted 12 Years Ago



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Added on March 9, 2011
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Chloe..Across the Universe
Chloe..Across the Universe

Smalltown, USA, AR



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Sometimes i feel like an alien in a strange land..can you relate? I love people and friends are just that to me , friends-if you request me as a friend it would be nice if you read something I have .. more..

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