If

If

A Poem by Chloe..Across the Universe

Should  I kiss your lips
Just the corner of your mouth
Where the honey drips - 
I wonder if  
I would speak your language

Your eyes soft and warm 
Just a tiny glint of devilishness
If I could kiss your eyelids
Softly so softly 
Could I see what you see 

Should I be able to nibble
Your earlobes partially covered
By your beautiful hair
Would I hear what you hear
With heartbeats

I wonder if I could
Kiss you, taste your soul
See myself through your eyes
Hear my heartbeats with yours
If I could would I like the me you see











© 2011 Chloe..Across the Universe


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Chloe..Across the Universe
Quick quack of a write -

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i love it!:)

Posted 13 Years Ago


Excellent...the whole concept is just very beautiful and you executed it wonderfully. an excellent write.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Chloe, i like how you play with words, use them in diffrent way...i like the mixture between shyness & audacity, i like your hesitation it gives more sensuality to your poem...keep writing pls i like it!!!

Posted 13 Years Ago


Great Job Chloe! You nailed it. I like the way you make me feel like I'm reading about 'my first love' ;thanks for sharing!

Posted 13 Years Ago


Nice one! I like your style! You have unique structure within your poetry. Your words express much emotion! Thank you for sharing!

Posted 13 Years Ago


Tosense the very sensations of another and to know they have you...
within is as close one can be to another...

nice thoughts Chloe...

Posted 13 Years Ago


Ah, a fellow eyelid kisser I see! I wrote one for my 'First love' like this.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Should I kiss your lips
Just the corner of your mouth
Where the honey drips -
I wonder if
I would speak your language

Ohhh... the last two lines are gorgeous...

If I could kiss your eyelids
Softly so softly
Could I see what you see

Oh god, this is even better!

Should I be able to nibble
Your earlobes partially covered
By your beautiful hair
Would I hear what you hear
With heartbeats

Okay, now I'm running out of words to describe how much I love this.

I wonder if I could
Kiss you, taste your soul
See myself through your eyes
Hear my heartbeats with yours
If I could would I like the me you see

Beautiful, beautiful... just a quacky what??

The ease and simplicity of this made it all the more brilliant.

Amazing Chloe, really!
Antonio :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


Wonderful wordcrafting! It's never about length or form, and all about how what you write touches others... and that you certainly achieve in abundance! Oddly enough, once I finished reading the image of the Wicked Queen gazing into her mirror came to mind. Did she start out wicked, or did her own fears corrupt her, like so many other people? We could easily ask the same questions of our selves.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Well, that is quite a sensual quackling write! To find the depth of one through such touching tenderness... flowing together and becoming mirrors of life and love.. Beautiful and deep...

Posted 13 Years Ago



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Chloe..Across the Universe
Chloe..Across the Universe

Smalltown, USA, AR



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Sometimes i feel like an alien in a strange land..can you relate? I love people and friends are just that to me , friends-if you request me as a friend it would be nice if you read something I have .. more..

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