Ouija Vu

Ouija Vu

A Poem by Chloe..Across the Universe

I hit the ground running
Feet flat on the clouds
As fast as Mercury
With broken wings
Light as an elephant
Heavy as a feather
Where's the ouija board
Deja vu
Deja vu
Day- light view
Not needed whispered
Purple dragonfly dressed in rags
Not needed butterfly
Dressed in silk hummed
Cloud-light shining brightly in my eyes
Blinding me
Seeing eye dog ahead
On a one-dollar bill
Follow me he said
A message I have
Ouija board ?
Deja vu
You swallowed the ouija board
Message inside you said
The viole(n)t-eyed cat with two tails
Soft as quills
Mercurious  sent me
Skimming the earth
Message inside
For better
Or worse
First or last
Now or later
Forever
Until the next
Deja vu
Deja vu
Orange light flashes
Shivering neon
Message must wait
Today's not the day

© 2012 Chloe..Across the Universe



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I see that I have found a new poet to read through.... I really enjoyed this poem.... It has me wanting a part 2.... Heavy as a feather..... Nice...... Nice allegories ...... Very nice thought out poem.......

Posted 1 Year Ago


I loved this. Very fluid, and back-to-the-body strength. I love the tempo and the word choice. Admittedly I don't read a lot of poetry, but I think this is beautiful.

Posted 1 Year Ago


The whole poem felt like someone running through an entire forest and almost made you out of breath even just reading it in your head, well done.

Posted 2 Years Ago


I wonder what would happen if you started with the last line and ended with it too? Would this make the poem go around and around?

Posted 3 Years Ago


Ooo... how fast paced and frenetic this is to read, for me anyway, I found myself speeding to the finale line and reading all over again!

Posted 3 Years Ago


I like the alternating antonyms. I also like using the style. It evokes conflicting emotions which makes one feel. Great job.

Posted 3 Years Ago


I like that bit where it goes "Light as an elephant
Heavy as a feather" - it's contradictory, but in a poetic way
Or "cloud-light" instead of "sun or moon light"
It moves quite quickly too.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Awesome contradictions and turnarounds. Really really enjoyed this and will be reading again. So much said it definitely requires and deserves to be read many a time.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Brava -Claps- I loved how it drips with rhythm.....I feel myself running with you, dodging the circumstances that prevent you from reading the message. And then I am left with desiring to know what the message is that you are waiting for, that your are running towards, that you are trying so desperately to attain through the repetitive pitfalls towards its being understood. I really really enjoyed this work of yours. The poem almost has a dream-like sensation to its rhythm and flow. Well done, well done.

Posted 3 Years Ago


all of the paradoxes work so well here, it is not the right day for the ouija board...

had one, used it often...its name was jim...it told me things...

right day or wrong day, i didn't ask it enough questions...took partial information, should have known more.

i agree with Lydia...the short compressed lines work well..not just urgency but a kind of rhythm that beats as a reminder.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Chloe..Across the Universe

3 Years Ago

Thank you Jacob I had a Ouija board long ago I didn't name it he didn't tell me much it was mostly f.. read more

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Chloe..Across the Universe
Chloe..Across the Universe

Smalltown, USA, AR



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