The Inside of Man

The Inside of Man

A Poem by Platus
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An experiment in free-writing.

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Have I ever seen the inside of man?

Have I made my peace with my own peacelessness?

What have you done

To make the day better?

What have you done

To make the day better?

I made a castle from my mind.

I cast a shadow from my castle.

Can someone catch my casted shadow?

But I saw the darkness

There was nothing

I saw it

I saw it

But it never saw me.

And I never saw what I was looking for.

Had you arrived at the start of my time

You would have seen a monster

A monster

And it would have been me!

How could I be a monster?

How could I be a man?

In the beginning there wasn’t anything else.

Have you made peace with happiness?

The greatest of all hells.

Have I made peace with you?

The greatest of all devils.

But not at the time in which we see

What is in the place where we refuse to look

We are starving

I am starving

You are not

But you make yourself fear

What is fearful.

While I and the devils

Us, our devils

Shall make a place on the inside of man.


© 2010 Platus



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Amazing, the extended metaphor was spectacular, the language and vocabulary also,, I can't critic this its immaculate. I wish I could write as well as your wrote this. I especially love the lines

"But I saw the darkness
There was nothing
I saw it
I saw it
But it never saw me."

Posted 7 Years Ago



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