The World Today

My attempt at a Repeating Quisset.

It's the absence of regimes.

 

Lives lost,

empty,

just extremes;

 

No answer sufficiant appearance grave.

 

No structure,

balance,

symmetry gave;

 

We can't always rein supreme.

 

We must,

should,

try dreams;

 

That cannot idolize indolent brave.

 

So gently,

softly,

righteously save.

Author's Note

The Repeating Quisset, invented- copyrighted by Michael
consists of sixteen lines with a 2-1 rhyme.
Written with 8 stanzas, in a 1-3 pattern.
The syllable formula is:
7 // 2-2-3 // 10 // 3-3-4 // 7 // 2-2-3 // 10 // 3-3-4.
With a specific line pattern as follows:
The last words in the 1st, 5th, 9th and 13th line must be A//B//A//B.
Repeating the same rhythm as the last words in the 1st, 5th, 9th,and 13th line,
the 4th, 8th, 12th and 16th line must be A//B//A//B.
The 1st and 4th line must be A//A. The 5th and 8th line must be B//B.
The 9th and 12th line must be A//A.
The 13th and 16th line must be B//B.
With 12 counts, the last word in the 1st line must be the same last word as in the 12th line.
Repeating 12 counts, the last word in the 5th line must match the last word in the 16th line.
Being five counts between the 1st and 5th line, the last word in the 4th line and the 9th line must be the same.
Repeating 5 counts, the last word in the 8th line must be the same as the last word in the 13th line.
With a specific syllable count as follows:
1-1-2-1-2
1-1
2
1-2
1-2-3-3-1
1-2
3
3-1
1-1-2
1-1
2
1-2
1-2-3-3-1
1-2
3
3-1

Reviews

[Michael X]

not so fast, you have to keep the same punctuation....this is awsome, I can't wait to see what you come up with and I'll add the specifics in the form. its something like period, comma, comma, comma semicoln, period
comma, comma, semicolon period. I need to look and draft it in, you have talent, I love the messege here

[Lydia]

Crazy form, I'd never come close to attempting something like that, but I liked it nonetheless. I loved the mystery in your words, great job.

[deeps]

I don't know to much about forms but I enjoyed the read.

[Dan Bullock]

Hardcore sequence following, you're brave...and clever for a wonderful outcome! :)

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Don't know much bout the form but the poem itself is spectacular... to be able to say so much in a few quick words is a great talent... what i see hear is playing it safe i nothing more then an early grave... none the less great work.

[Crazy Cat Man]

we must always find a moral center and find inner peace in this crazy world.....or we would be the ones who become crazy too jaja