"Break Up Song"

I can take it

I can pluck the flies
off your dead thoughts
and chew them down
propeller wings
translucent
like the moments
before our fingers touch
horizontal, lying in whispers
where sacred crosses
of dead poets
die alone without us


I can take it

I can curl your words

backwards like a rug  

and roll them out

in red welcome wagons

over snow filled paths

in and out of my heart

whenever I want to
and you can't stop me
like you can't
tell me I'm lying
when I love you


I can take it

I can grow sun glints
in furious hurricane skies
my favorite chair in the air
spinning up alone
lightly, bodiless, happy
like a sharp laugh
from a candy-mouthed boy
and the thoughts go
chugging slowly by
brilliant pine trees

on two shining steel rails

Reviews

[Justine Johnston]

I love the use of the line "I can take it"
Shows no weakness, it shows that you will still go on through the hurt you will still feel sometimes.
It shows that just because this constant thing in your life is no longer as prominent, doesn't mean you can't move on and continue to grow.

In other words, brilliant.

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

This inspires strength at a very hard hour. The best revenge after a break up, is to keep on smiling and never breaking.

[AMarie]

Vivid speach.. I loved it.

[Muse]

Yeah we can take it, the pain of love...some times it goes down like barbwire, it's hard to love without self-inflicting a few injuries, it's ironic enough, we are always looking for somebody to kiss it better.

[charlie]

This poem deserves a better review than I can give, which is to say I found it dazzling. It was those "sun glints in hurricane skies" ...

I love this kind of writing. Sure look forward to the rest of your catalogue.
Bravo, Steven.

[Ma'at]

the imagery in this poem is just astonishing, as well as the meaning and emotion
-GS