Privation

Privation

A Poem by Light



 Sublime

I've loved You once
in all life times
once, a moment
the ultimate
of eternity measures
beyond, I thought I could
still create a rhythm
to match Your supreme spirit
ever loving
ever rising
away from all the noises
of the earthy voices
I try still to hear
the whispers of Your majesty

I can not see Your face
but inside my heart
and when this immense need
of warmth
sweeps all through
tearing my brain,
my breaths and veins
I struggle to find the solace
in what will be left
of our immortal beings
when our lives pass
to the greater side
some have the eternal energy
to feed the soul
a light cast on the road
ever glowing 
like these sheets of music
raising the senses
to the higher level
to feel the nothingness
the touch of the real existence
free like the air
gentle, strong and yielding

The incarnate of love
is what You are
those wide endless skies
the spell of the gray sun
over the galaxies
the power of the moon
full at midnight
the touch of the universe
over the ground
the prestige over the wings
of this lone butterfly.


©  Gh ~*

20.Feb.2016


© 2017 Light



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Gh⁓*
From my mind's-eye, down into the heart and core, I feel the gentle, passionate touches of a woman's warm spirit flowing and undulating smoothly across, down, and through every letter, word, and line of each verse, gathering-up into images that dance and flicker into an emotional blessing my soul can taste … a feast, a smorgasbord, and cornucopia of poetical wonderment to fill one's most tenderly passionate senses to overflowing, from the sensationally sheer power and sensitivity of golden, glittering stardust ink laid across the parchment of my mind.

From the gorgeous spray of flowers to the gently presented verses, this is wondrous beauty only true spiritual lovers' hearts can fully and completely hear, and the soft whispers are ohhh so sweet … thank you, Dear Poetess, for the blessed moments shared! ⁓ Richard ✨

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Light

1 Month Ago

Thank You, for this embracing, thoughtful and heartfelt review, words enfold with serenity and under.. read more
Richard

1 Month Ago

A gift from the heart*



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Gh⁓*
From my mind's-eye, down into the heart and core, I feel the gentle, passionate touches of a woman's warm spirit flowing and undulating smoothly across, down, and through every letter, word, and line of each verse, gathering-up into images that dance and flicker into an emotional blessing my soul can taste … a feast, a smorgasbord, and cornucopia of poetical wonderment to fill one's most tenderly passionate senses to overflowing, from the sensationally sheer power and sensitivity of golden, glittering stardust ink laid across the parchment of my mind.

From the gorgeous spray of flowers to the gently presented verses, this is wondrous beauty only true spiritual lovers' hearts can fully and completely hear, and the soft whispers are ohhh so sweet … thank you, Dear Poetess, for the blessed moments shared! ⁓ Richard ✨

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Light

1 Month Ago

Thank You, for this embracing, thoughtful and heartfelt review, words enfold with serenity and under.. read more
Richard

1 Month Ago

A gift from the heart*
u may be a professional write /poet but no matter your expressions and love are so well expressed.. deep emotion

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Light

2 Months Ago

Thank You so much my friend for another very sweet and kind review, I don't consider my self a profe.. read more
Your work is utterly feminine gender.. even to the spray of flower above your poem. Your language flows genly, a stream of words without hiccups, without pauses.. seems that is how you see loving another person.. indefinite, infinite.

Your final stanza strikes me as being almost spiritual.. or is spiritual in a way that you bow to the beauty of the 'all around' of love exchanged. You being the oh so welcoming recipient Beautiful.

Wishing you all you wish for yourself and those you love, dear Light.

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emmajoy

2 Months Ago

Thank you so very much for your sweet message x
Light

2 Months Ago

warmly welcome :)
Confess it, you love enjembements, right? You made such a rich and skilled use of it I can just tell you do. The result is clear: a very enjoyable flow, a call attracting the reader's attention to the end and beginning of every verse ... I see a lot here. In the first stanza, my attention was caught by the constant focus on measures of time, I can see the importance given to it by this constant reminder (once, life, ultimate, eternity ...). The second stanza had something of a metaphysical taste which was unexpected and enjoyable, on the final stanza the loved one-nature couple was quintessentially romantic, which of course as a huge fan of Romanticism I loved.
Great job !!

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Light

2 Months Ago

forgive the "uneducated" me when it comes to poetry, so I searched for "enjembement" to understand w.. read more
When Light speaks to us in poetry, fairy diamond-dust floats down on this weary world and veils it in wonder...” the incarnate of love”- words bespeaking divinity and resting like gossamer on all they touch. Thank you for your ethereal beauty my friend!

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Light

2 Months Ago

Since You've started reading and reviewing me, You weren't but the sweetest with the most wonderful .. read more
Annette Pisano Higley

2 Months Ago

Xoxoxo:):)
Baroque and extremely romantic, a poem that floods the ears of music and the mind of suggestions. I see Love is your favorite poetical topos and reading your creations on this forum, I also can tell you are able to picture different shades of Love: from the joyful admiration for the beloved one to the deepest despair for the long privation. Here it seems to me you have captured two different spirits, yet joined by the same object: there is indeed sorrow for privation (the title speaks for itself) but at also a sort of fulfillment. Even if each word is veiled with sorrow, the tone of the poem is vibrant with voluptuosness (which is all in all, considered the nature of languishing, puzzling and intriguing). I am surprised by the abundance of adjective, words and imagines you're capable of using for describing an absence: you transmit clearly the urge of an heart to fill the void, by summoning powerfull visions that confuse and numb the sorrow. It is emblematic in fact the presence of words such as 'sublime', 'life time', 'eternity', 'supreme', 'mejesty', 'immortal' etc, which at once give us the idea of something exceding the common bonds of time and space. Thrilling with musicality, rhytms witch suggest a metric, but without rushing the reader from one verse to the other, it is a good example of romantic sonnet, somewhat resembling those of an opera or a moral play. Really dense of adjectives and aestethic constructs, it requires more then a reading, but at the end it pleases the fantasy of those who likes indulge in strong emothions and have taste for dramatic love stories. I must confess it's not 'my cup of tea', but that does not mean I cannot appreciate your outstanding poetic ability.
Powerful and desperate, it kept me reading until the end :)


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Nerio

2 Months Ago

I'm glad for your appreciation. Actually I don't know if those review of mine are ok for the standar.. read more
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Light

2 Months Ago

For me, someone who gave so much time reading a poem with this deeply caring thoughtfulnr, truly des.. read more

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