Longings Flame

A nod to that which drives us

                                                                 

Seared from within by longings flame

clutching for life to a tiger's mane

wearied head hung, desperate game

 

tempered by the gains of learning

bursting from my chest in yearning

spurred to excel by the ache there burning

 

blinded eyes met squinting, sun

dreams afar yet searching, run

fulfillment seeking, never done

 

youth born vision, striving on

hope subdued yet back, each dawn

driven, vain achievers pawn

 

odds that favor, believers math

hidden view, the future path

humility’s insightful laugh

humility’s insightful laugh…

 

Rikkevi Rue

Copyright 2011 all rights reserved

Reviews

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

you~my friend~are one of a handful of 21st century writers I know who not only handle classic rhythmic patterns flawlessly but know how to subtly insert personalized seedlets of unique expressive surreality that makes comprehensive emotional sense flawlessly~

[Rikkevi Rue]

compliments from a truly great poet are always intoxicating!

[Jay]

I see the heros' salt swept face leaning into a wind from the bow of a magnificent ship...

[Rikkevi Rue]

yes, perhaps...there is a stoic cast and a hint at the epic I guess, though in truth it was one of those reflective moments... Thank you for your kind words

[Robin]

the rhyme is subliminal - aim, earning , un , on , and the final stanza peers into the depths of the mirrorscape between poet and poetry

[Rikkevi Rue]

As always my friend you see with that most penetrating vision and hear with the keen inner ear and aegis of the aesthetically endowed!

[Tate Morgan]

The story of the learned mans desires in life to reach for the unattainable.It is never by the end but with the journey we are cured

[Rikkevi Rue]

Indeed, perhaps each milestone that is passed is never seen due to the constant focusing of a new one in the distance...

[Chris]

Who is to argue with "fun"? Aren't we allowed to play too?

Chris

[Rikkevi Rue]

hee hee hee! Let the games begin :-)

[sarah]

This is a wonderful write the emotion in this is very well written and expressed great write!

[.]

sublime in it's lyrical content..your smooth rhythmic meter and rhyme is a pleasure to read..this coupled with the fact that you still maintain an interesting and thoughtful read is really a pleasure..there's a depth to this ..loved it

[Rikkevi Rue]

Heady words from one who actually knows the dance! Thank you compadre!

[Poeticadia]

Whatever the odds, the poets amongst us will always be driven towards achieving our dreams, fuelled by that 'flame' within. 'Humility's insightful laugh' can be hard to take sometimes... but here you have grasped it and turned it into poetry... turned it on it's head to send a message out to every reader and poet alike in strong images, measured rhythm and a lyrically driven rhyme scheme. A poem that speaks out to all of us, keeps the flame burning!

[Rikkevi Rue]

so true my friend. You are very kind and I appreciate your perspective and insightful reflection!

[Christie Moses]

Lyrical, smooth and strong. You have such a talent for rhythm and I love the way this flows.
Its also quite beautiful in wording. x

[Rikkevi Rue]

very late am i in a response! I appreciate and value your view considering you are one of the very best writers here. Danke!

[BABy]

I love this...message in bottle....hello I'm BABy