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A very SIMPLE poem to my "crush" . . . I slipped it, anonymously, in his locker.

Oceans - innocence, intelligence - deep and blue behind your glasses.

Rose petals, clover

Softly set in a sealed smile, so red against white, lightly rouged, snow.

Framed upon your masculine jaw.

You are beautiful.

Author's Note

It is simple and short . . . just a locker love note. I never even titled it. I know it is cheesy (ha ha).
P.S. If you notice certain patterns in my poems (as I have stated in my "About Me" section) - like this one and the last one - about certain objects or colors, that is because it is about the same person/situation. Not all of my poems will be this way but these are the ones I am posting right now and they are not in chronological order.

Reviews

[AliciaB]

Simple, but deep. I'm intrigued by the use of "innocence" for "oceans" - it's not something that generally first comes to mind when one thinks of the sea. And yet, if you consider it, it works very well. The purity and natural beauty of the ocean has a profound sort of innocence to it, just as this person's eyes do. I really like the lines about his lips, too. Great alliteration with the "s" sounds in the beginning of the third line. The final verse drives it completely home. Sometimes people toss around that phrase in a sort of wishy-washy way; it's well-intended, but it loses its meaning after a while. That's not the case here. I can FEEL that you mean it. The whole poem sets up this idea, and stating it explicitly at the end is a perfect way to finish it. Overall, this is marvelously heartfelt. Great work!

[LittleBear]

Aww thank you. This is one of my simpler works but I did put my heart into it so to see you say all of these wonderful things and give such an in depth review to my insignificant poem really made my week. You alway completely get my work and I really appreciate that. Thank you so much dear *hugs* ♡♡

[barleygirl]

It's original to offer a locker note like this . . . something I've never seen, but which is relatable in a vicarious way. We can imagine ourselves in this situation. I wonder if a high school guy would actually relate to this level of poetic expression, however . . . he would have to be an unusually sensitive type, perhaps *smile*

[LittleBear]

Thanks for your review! I really appreciate your consistent honesty and thought that you put in to each review. I try to be original so I am glad and I believe that he would understand . . . he is different :)

[M]

I like this :) :) :)
this is so cute

[LittleBear]

Haha! Thank you very much ♡