糖

3/21/2016 - Happy World Poetry Day

My linguistic flavor is only so;

it fathoms for the attention of you, my love

the tendrils you ride upon, however

cast away hope to communicate the  love

My artistic vision also cries;

its claim of being "different" in a sense of the "same"

my complex mind of things

My, aren't the flowers beautiful today

I've molded sugar and water with an imagination

All just to please you

And yet, you lightly remember to ignore me

All the while, you cling to the comrade who destroyed you

All the while I realize;

youthfulness is a disgusting thing

So, claim my linguistic candy in your mouth

Read the visions I craft of you;

Continue to wear dead eyes;

Continue to let my linguistic love die.

(by Jake Brunton a.k.a SenpaiJake)

Author's Note

'糖' used in the pronunciation for 'Candy.'

Reviews

[Insight "MH"]

Lovely imagery! Keep up the good work.

[𝐋.𝐂.]

Is the "糖" here means something sweet?
If yes, then the "糖" is correct. ("糖" is for something that's sweet, doesn't have to be sugar.)
But if you're talking about sugar products, then it's "醣".

"I've molded sugar and water with an imagination

All just to please you

And yet, you lightly remember to ignore me

All the while, you cling to the comrade who destroyed you

All the while I realize;

youthfulness is a disgusting thing" ⬅ really like this part :)

[Jake Brunton]

Yep, it's used as ame for candy. Not specifically sugar products. And I'm glad you liked the poem! :)

[Ana R]

Your vocabulary is admirable and you are very eloquent when expressing yourself.

[Jake Brunton]

Thank you Ana, I'm very happy to hear that! I've been struggling a bit with the doubt that I may not be expressing myself and/or my meanings well enough. I like to be cryptic, but I don't want to go too deep into it. Thanks for your time :)