Two of Them

two struggles to be de-struggled, but are they really and finally?

two of them,
pretend to be happy
fight upright
to dream to stay happy

the two resign
but cry alone
and hide those tears
paining cyclone

we blame the bodies
and curse them too
fault is none's
if emotions argue

Reviews

[Kate Moore]

[Moriarty]

painfully poignant...very nicely written...

[Amila Jay]

This is great :))

[EMMIE]

Awesome! Very creative, unique and very well composed!

[Dayran]

A presumption to be peaceful that breaks up when new initiatives are born.

[Lina Grey]

"we blame the bodies
and curse them too
fault is none's
if emotions argue"
Very true! Some struggles aren't as easy as black and white, and somethings are diffecult to resolve. A nice piece with excellent rhyming and flow. Thank you.

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

This has such a nice flow! Great job :) Keep up the good work and keep writing my friend!




Ashley Rivers--Dream BIG and you'll win BIG:)

[Coyote Poetry]

Hard to get people on the same page. Take luck and timing. I like the feel of confusion and the strong ending. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[AK]

Ww! Nice poem! The rhyming scheme is great! Keep writing!