Broken Heart Strings

a painful and sad memory..

Strings of a broken heart

claiming a painful tune,

playing melancholy notes, to

not just to be heard

but feel it through.

Time heals all it is said,

but for scars and scabs, not all true;

lying in the lamp shade shadows,

they narrate a story, a memory

not a treasured one but a bitter truth.

Be it a person, be it a place

a severe loss or drained pace;

many things, many ways

can leave you with this:

a broken hearted cage. 

Author's Note

This was from few months ago... it felt like I would end up with an angry bruise on my chest..

Reviews

[L. C. Rhodes]

Very good, as is all of your work. You might consider following the imagery of the instrument to the end, but it works just as well to have a different analogy in each stanza. The heart as an instrument, then a record of the past,and then a cage. The progression you showed has some very powerful meanings.

[Sindu]

Thanks Rhodes for such a great review! Yup, I wanted to elucidate it more in different aspects. I wanted it to paint more than just a broken heart. Thanks again.

[Roshan Nair]

A great write sindu! its painful yet peaceful.. theres immense depth of emotions I sense you've penned here, its almost perceptible. Lovely write. keep posting! cheers

[Mayank]

you need to calm down, maybe tough phase. Move on.

[Sindu]

Thanks Mayank for the kind words. I did :)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

Nicely done!
Heartbreaks are the most painful.
An insightful write.
I liked it!
:)

[Sindu]

Thanks a lot Puskhar. Glad you liked it :)

[hardeep sabharwal]

title here is good but poem is too good, your words are touching and fabulous

[Sindu]

Thank you so much Hardeep.

[R Smith]

Good writing Sindu, definitely a very heartfelt song of deep emotion, you express this extremely well and clearly have a well of passion to come yet :)

[Sindu]

Thanks a lot Richard! That means a lot. Hope it shapes out right :)

[Avinash]

A melodious melancholy which has got perfect rhythm. Indeed we all come to terms with our pain, no matter how much it hurts in the beginning. We all grow stronger if we are able to take it gracefully.Keep penning on.

[Sindu]

Thanks Avinash! I agree. As journey progresses it should be left behind and I wanted to show that relationships aren't the only ones that cause it. Thanks again for stopping by!

[Frieda P]

Some bruises last a lifetime, you've pen'd it so well...felt this one Sindu!

[Sindu]

Thanks a lot Frieda for kind words! Means a lot coming from you.. This one's something close to me too..

[Frieda P]

I could sense that, you're welcome Sindu...

[MomzillaNC]

"Not just be heard
but feel it through"
AND:
"lying in the lamp shade shadows,

Terrific and compelling lines. Really just WOW lines.

NOTES: mostly for the sake meter, maybe
"playing melancholy notes,
not just [to] be heard"
AND:
"but for scars and scabs… not true!
lying in lamp shade shadows…
not treasured… but a bitter truth

AND: use a colon instead of a comma at the end of this line: "can leave you with this:"

[Sindu]

Thanks a lot Momzi! Those lines are something else.. Yup I will tweak it!

[MomzillaNC]

You're welcome. I'm glad I could help.

[Saddam]

lying in the lamp shade shadows,
they narrate a story, a memory
not really treasured but a bitter truth.

Exactly I can relate with you very well.... I know the pain. Alone nights, empty days...every moments a shadow follow.... but there was none as I look back... Ah! a very good piece of work with true painful memory.

[Sindu]

Yes they were some distraught times... Thanks a lot.. hope you feel better now..

[Saddam]

exactly as you can.... this site make me feel better.. Hope you too.