The Saddest Lines

The Saddest Lines

A Poem by Enigma
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Inspired from "Tonight I can write the saddest lines" by Pablo Neruda.

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Words
Thought and forgotten
Misty vapours of their existence rise to the skies
And become feathery clouds
Of forgotten thoughts
All but at the tip of my hand

Do I dare to reclaim
What is mine
What I shared
What was stolen
With waves that rise once and fall twice
With low whispers that escape those weary lips
With a sigh sent towards a halved moon
I try to write the saddest lines.







© 2013 Enigma



Author's Note

Enigma
Note:-
If anyone is familiar with the poetry of Pablo Neruda, they can notice the instant connection here. His poem "Tonight I can write the saddest lines" is the inspiration behind this work. Although I have read his work only in translation, but still the beauty of his words have not failed to awe me.

Better still, this was one of my spontaneous pieces which I found scribbled at the back of a notebook.

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This is a wonderful poem- the relationship between nature and writing is a very beautiful one, and I love the way your added in sadness in your composition as well.

Now you make me feel interested in finding out more about Pablo Neruda as well at the moment :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


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"reclaim what was mine/ what i shared/ what was stolen"

i really like that, and find double meaning...could be a woman's love..but also the words of poetry...we share them, claim them as ours...but often we feel we have stolen them from something we have read..we are influenced, inspired by what we read...

i love this poem...my only slight suggestion...is the two "forgottens" i wanted to read "misplaced" into one of those spots...or some synomym..because that repetition there feels accidental rather than intended.

but really a strong piece, and very relatable.

jacob

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is a wonderful poem- the relationship between nature and writing is a very beautiful one, and I love the way your added in sadness in your composition as well.

Now you make me feel interested in finding out more about Pablo Neruda as well at the moment :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A good poem indeed...Thank you for sharing...:)

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

and you do, I love Pablo, wonderful!

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is really lovely and yes I do see the connection. I had never heard of him until I saw the movie "Il Postino". His writing truly does inspire and your poem is a wonderful example of that. I like the picture you chose to accompany it too.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Enigma
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"Who am I?" Preeti. Twenty Two. Female. Mentally twisted into a Gordian knot. Making regular escapades into the realm of the fantasy, riding high on my words. Lazy. Indecisive. .. more..

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