All the Things I'll Never Hear

...Aptly named.

 

“I love the way she looks in the morning

When her naturally curly hair

Fans out on the pillow

 

“I love how she drives all over the neighborhood

Even when she’s about to turn onto her street

Because her favorite song just came on

 

“God damn, she’s so romantic.

 

“Her skin glows when she gets out of the shower

Her hair is tame when it’s wet

I want what’s under that towel

 

“When we’re in bed

All I want is her

To scream my name

 

“I want her to moan again

Arch up to me

Oh God, baby, I’ll never get enough of you

 

“I know she loves the ocean

I know she wants to lie on the grassy hills of Palos Verdes

I want to be one with her earth

 

“Money, education, kids, bills

Temper tantrums, angry silences

I want it all.

 

“I wanna run my finger up her spine

Watch her curl backwards

God damn, baby

 

“Wear that flowing white skirt you love baby

And that white peasant blouse, just wear it

Be my princess

 

“I could never cheat on you

I’d do anything for you

But not that.

 

“I want her to wrap her arms around my waist

She likes the soft, white undershirt I wear

It makes her wanna kiss me

 

“Let's waltz

Like you do in your daydreams

Thinking of me

 

“I want your curly hair

I want your big everything

Oooh, you’re ticklish on your neck

 

“Lie down

Get on me

Do what it takes to make you smile

 

“Open up to me, Stef

Let me into your fantasies

I can’t run away in there

 

“Baby, please

I wanna be yours

The way you wanna be mine

 

“Let’s break the bed

The headboard too

Let’s break everything they think we should have

 

“You’re short, fat, curly haired

You’re woman and child at once

Special parts of your body are marked

 

“You’re impatient, immature

Financially behind

Stuck in the past

 

“There are millions

Of women to choose

And I want you."

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

...Yes, I suck, and in dire need of eharmony.com. Who wants to get me a credit card first?

Reviews

[Steve]

I really enjoyed this, it was a fascinating read. For me I liked how all romantic notions are slowly stripped away to reveal what is a pure 'wanting' by the end of the poem. The 'natural curly hair' that 'fans out onto the pillow' dissolves to an object of pure desire ('I want your curly hair'), and then at the end to just a vulgar description ('short fat curly haired'). Importantly the 'love' is still there, the guy seems complex and comes across as maybe arrogant but there is a desperate honesty in his confession, his need for this girl.
An awesome write.

[Just Plain Me]

this is a really good poem :)

[perfectlymetiKulous]

OMG... I absolutely adored this poem. So making it a favorite right this instant.
This poem was so honest, so sweet, so touching, so direct, so unique... just so many things.

Favorite lines:
"Let me into your fantasies
I can't run away in there"

"Let's break the bed
The headboard too
Let's break everything they think we should have"

This was so great. I can't wait to read more of your work.

[Brjden (Bridge-Den) Cre..]

Very descriptive and romantic! I enjoyed this thoroughly! I love your descriptions that gives an underlining romanticism to the entire piece....

"I love how she drives all over the neighborhood
Even when she's about to turn onto her street
Because her favorite song just came on

"God damn, she's so romantic.

"Her skin glows when she gets out of the shower
Her hair is tame when it's wet
I want what's under that towel"

This piece was great! And I never went on eharmony.com, but they will be receiving an incredible jewel if they get you! Your writing is inspiring!

[Hisou_Tenshi]

I understand. It was a lovely poem. Thanks.

[Gandré]

This poem was very American to me and I liked it. We seek and seek and sometimes overlook what we are looking for. I liked the romance and searching for the ultimate love.

[Orahemae December]

What in god's name makes you think this sucks. Its great. thanks for entering this into my contest. Its really great. this poem is not like the others that mentions what they want. normally everyone just think thinks about sex. this says soo much more. Kodos.

[Drew Wade]

why don't you think you'll hear those? ahh.. don't worry about life! life is going to come at you with everything it has before you know it, and you won't be too happy about it then, because all that stuff has bad sides of its own. Enjoy where you're at right now, and have fun with the good parts right now.

haha.

this was a good poem, thoughtful and deep, and I hope you get what you want some day (soon).

[Saturnalia]

Aw, so romantic. You don't suck, either. I found it very endearing and true. Everyone wants that one person. When I read the lines "I love how she drives all over the neighborhood Even when she's about to turn onto her street Because her favorite song just came on" I nodded in understanding. I also liked the lines "Money, education, kids, bills Temper tantrums, angry silences I want it all." It made me think a while. When thinking of our perfect partner, we usually don't think of the downsides to the relationship. This rings true on so many levels. Especially at the end, when it goes into more detail about the "faults".
This poem was really romantic, but juxtaposed with the title, somewhat sad. You'll hear these words one day. Everyone eventually does.
...Or am I just hopeful?