Yes, I remember, do you....

in response to a poem by Albert Freeman... my love, my life.

Yes, I remember.. the sweet first glance

my excitement was only nerves surpassed

I remember taking your measure in height

Your stride as you walked into my sight

 

I remember the thrill of our first embrace

My girlish giggle, oh sheesh i was disgraced..

hahaa but I loved your smile and your eyes on me

You said, "you're photos, justice do not give thee"

 

I grinned like a fool, almost jumping like a girl

my heart was thumping when you took my hand

Your skin felt warm and your fingers felt right

entwined with mine

 

So tall and sexy, so sweet and strong

How could I be so lucky? It had been so long

The wait was over and we were on our way

To know one another in that special way

 

My private place, my home , sanctuary

I shared with you and it was so scary

But within minutes your voice, your thoughts

Your caring, did make me warm and airy

 

Our late nite talks, our laughs we shared

You did capture me,Under your spell,

do you Remember Me?

I do, I Remember it Well....

 

xxxx

 

 

Reviews

[Laura E. Aranda]

The ending was crazy
you said do you remember me?
Does that mean this lovely perfect story came to an abrupt end! I do hope NOT! I love the girly feelings erupting from this write! Good luck in the contest.....Cheers and all the beauty in the world, lea

[Angel's Lady]

Oh how very wonderful! Yes, I remember too! Those first moments, such a treasured memory. I think love would last longer if everyone took the time to remember! Great write!

[Bear]

"do you remember me" a question often wondered about loves and friends of one's past. Your words took me on a mental journey back in time remembering those I loved in the past, and damn love them still though our time together was long ago. You pen good stuff! ;~) Thanks again for sharing you thoughts.
Bear

[Michael X]

mel, this poem is captivating in concept, sensuously defining adoration, admiration and what it feels
like to be in love, to know what it is to treasure love, beautifully blissful, the thought focus is direct,
the rhythm carries a forward motion which in my opinion punctuates your thoughts with feelings of happiness in broad sense, at the same time capturing the minute details of sweet romance,
sure to set the readers heart adrift. well penned, passionate form, colorfully imaginative wording.

[Albert Freeman]

This is perfect. :)

Nothing I can add would do it justice.

I love you xxx