Goodbye

Goodbye

A Poem by Sweet
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I was inspired by sad songs. Plus after writing "Move on" I felt that I also had to say "Goodbye" ...

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I waited so long, to say this simple word

Powerful enough to destroy my whole world

 

A world of sweet dreams and lovely fantasy

A world sometimes governed by insanity

 

Although I am scared, to simply walk away

I know there’s no point for me to try to stay

 

Thank you for the joy that you brought upon my life

Sadly it was just a lie that struck my heart with a knife

 

I’ll cry you, I’ll miss you, and I’ll sing you sad songs

But amidst all this ache I know I have to be strong

 

Now I want you to hear my sweet voice one last time

Resounding in your head like the sound of a chime

 

But all that you’ll hear is my footsteps slip by

Vanishing in the distance as I wave you Goodbye  ! 


© 2016 Sweet



Author's Note

Sweet
Thank you for reading my poem, I would love to hear your thoughts about it ^_^

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No goodbye is a good one.
"But all that you’ll hear is my footsteps slip by
Vanishing in the distance as I wave you Goodbye ! "
I liked the above lines and the flow of thoughts leading to the honest ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sweet

1 Year Ago

Thank you very much reviewing it. I happy you liked ^_^
Coyote Poetry

1 Year Ago

I did and you are welcome.



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so sweet

Posted 1 Year Ago


Saying Good bye is never easy when you have suffered pain of love and trying to move on. I know how it feels.
You wrote the poem nicely , it is emotional and full of feelings. I liked it.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Sweet, this poem is heavy with emotional and personal feelings.
You, wrote this with your heart in your hands... It touched a nerve
from my past... The word "goodbye" should be reserved for funerals
and probably so, eternal break ups...
Enjoyed very much, well penned from your kind heart. Goodbye!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Sweet

1 Year Ago

Thank you for sharing your thoughts.
It's always a hard thing to say goodbye, at least for m.. read more
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R
Great job! Love the words you chose.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Sweet

1 Year Ago

Thank you very much. I'm pleased to hear you liked it ^_^
Great rhythm and rhyme to this heartfelt yet fun to read poesy. The second line to every stanza made me smile at how you rhymed with the first line, but with yet such a powerful meaning to go with it. You're an amazing writer!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sweet

1 Year Ago

Thank you very much for the compliments. It fills my heart with joy to see that my writing reaches p.. read more
Cyprian Van Dyke

1 Year Ago

You're most welcome! It is kinda sad. I see that now.
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Gee
Really enjoyed this, a tale of lost love told well in a well written, easily flowing poem. SWEET, sweet

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sweet

1 Year Ago

Haha, thank you ^_^ I'm happy I was able to say "Goodbye" in a "sweet" way.
Beautifully written. I loved the flow. Keep it up.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sweet

1 Year Ago

Thank you, I'll keep working hard in hopes to better myself and become a better writer =D
I love poetry inspired by other works of art! This one is very good. You encompass many facets of breaking up and "saying goodbye" to someone... I especially like the idea of "A world of sweet dreams and lovely fantasy / A world sometimes governed by insanity." I've never actually been in this kind of a relationship before, but... this sounds like the inside of my head. :) My favorite part, however, is the final four lines. I like how you play upon the sound imagery with "sweet voice," "sound of a chime," and "all that you'll hear is my footsteps slip away." Nice work!


Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sweet

1 Year Ago

Thanks so much for sharing your thoughts and kind words.
My head is always filled with thoug.. read more
No goodbye is a good one.
"But all that you’ll hear is my footsteps slip by
Vanishing in the distance as I wave you Goodbye ! "
I liked the above lines and the flow of thoughts leading to the honest ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sweet

1 Year Ago

Thank you very much reviewing it. I happy you liked ^_^
Coyote Poetry

1 Year Ago

I did and you are welcome.

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