Shelter

Shelter

A Poem by Sweet

I’m just a lonely child, seeking out for a home

With nothing but a heart that doesn’t cease to roam

 

But what is really a home? Does it even exist?

I just feel like a fool as in this quest I persist

 

My sore legs are weary, on this never ending slope

It's easier to go down, to go up requires hope

 

I hear your voice in the distance, which I cannot ignore

Its sweetness seduces me, as it makes my heart soar

 

I reach my hand out to you, tired of being a waif

Hold me tight in your arms; I just want to feel safe

 

I dream that you’d love me and protect me from harm

That you’d cast away fear, that you’d become my charm

 

I hope that my heart, does not bring to you welter

‘Cause all I ask of you, is that you give me shelter


© 2016 Sweet



Author's Note

Sweet
Picture from "The garden of words" (wonderful movie <3)
I hope you enjoyed reading this poem and would love to hear your thoughts about it ^_^

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Relatable & thought-provoking message . . . there are many ways this can be interpreted, which makes it a nice mystery . . . it could be a message to a person we hope to be a friend or lover, it could be to a person playing a "parent" role in one's life, & my favorite interpretation would be as a message to God. One of the most thought-provoking stanzas is #2 - "home" can be many things to different people, so I like your questioning. For the most part, rhyming is good, but in the last stanza, "welter" feels a bit like you're reaching for this rhyme, since the meaning isn't as relatable as the rest of your poem.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sweet

1 Year Ago

Hello Barley. Thanks so much for reviewing my poem. It's always a pleasure to read your thoughts. I'.. read more



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Beautiful poem! I loved every part more and more as I read on to the end. "My sore legs are weary, on this never-ending slope. It's easier to go down, to go up requires hope." - such a powerful stanza, wow!

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Sweet

1 Year Ago

Doing fine thx ^_^ how about you ?
Cyprian Van Dyke

1 Year Ago

I'm doing alright. I wrote a good story a couple hours ago, can't complain.
You been writing.. read more
Sweet

1 Year Ago

Nice ^_^ can't wait to read it.
Yeah, have been quite busy but I'm working on a few poem/stor.. read more
Relatable & thought-provoking message . . . there are many ways this can be interpreted, which makes it a nice mystery . . . it could be a message to a person we hope to be a friend or lover, it could be to a person playing a "parent" role in one's life, & my favorite interpretation would be as a message to God. One of the most thought-provoking stanzas is #2 - "home" can be many things to different people, so I like your questioning. For the most part, rhyming is good, but in the last stanza, "welter" feels a bit like you're reaching for this rhyme, since the meaning isn't as relatable as the rest of your poem.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sweet

1 Year Ago

Hello Barley. Thanks so much for reviewing my poem. It's always a pleasure to read your thoughts. I'.. read more
A sad journey when we are needing shelter and a safe place.
"I hope that my heart, does not bring to you welter
‘Cause all I ask of you, is that you give me shelter"
I like the flow of thoughts leading to the above lines. Shelter is needed for us to become whole. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 1 Year Ago


To seek out love that will not only protect and shelter but will edure the hearts desire for true love through good and bad times...
Nice interactions of words to express your feelings....
Thanks Sweet....

Posted 1 Year Ago


I did enjoy reading this poem - very much so! It has a poignant, honest tone; all the speaker wants is rest and protection, and that is touching. I really love the lines "My sore legs are weary, on this never ending slope / It's easier to go down, to go up requires hope." It's a beautiful picture of, really, life itself. Excellent couplet there. Overall, well-written. Great work!


Posted 1 Year Ago


Sweet

1 Year Ago

Hello Alicia. Thank you so much for sharing your thoughts, they are very motivating.
Happy to.. read more
Wow Sweet you truly have a unique way with words and I surely love it. You have to me described the epitome of a woman's needs. Put in a beautiful graceful elegance.

Stunning!!!
Blessings
El

Posted 1 Year Ago


Sweet

1 Year Ago

Thank you very much for your kind words Elmarie, they are really encouraging ^_^
Blessings

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Added on June 30, 2016
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