Lady In The Half-Light

Who dares kiss her lips?

I saw Truth, glimpsed her briefly

Amidst a murky haze

Her face shone with animation

And her eyes were all ablaze.

She was lithe, and fair, and fragile

Her lips were firm and full

She was at once so lovely,

So pure, and terrible.

 

I saw Truth, glimpsed her briefly

Amidst a swirling shroud

Her face shone with illumination

And cast its rays around.

My heart swelled with emotion,

In my eye glistened a tear

I felt at once elation,

Transport, and joy, and fear.

 

I saw Truth glimpsed her briefly

Amidst a stifling dark

Her face shone with authority

And her eyes bid me hark;

If I’d blinked I would have missed her

Her lips were firm and full

Her eyes dared me to kiss her

Before she melted once more into gloom…

 

Reviews

[angelina]

I like your version of Truth's personification. It gives meaning to what the truth should be should it be a human woman also like the fact that you added the part that makes you want to taint the truth making it into a half truth. It's quite unique!

[BrynnaW.]

Beautiful! I really enjoyed reading this! Keep on writing!

[Short.Nerd]

Wonderful!

[Luchia Noname]

oh my i love this its amazing nice job :)

[{A}shley {B}lack @-;-]

yet again you never cease to amaze me and like the reviewers before me I have to agree the imagery to this piece was faultless the subject matter was as always a great choice and I look forward to reading more

[Greg Skura]

Wow! This is so provocative. Great imagery and flow.

[Maureen Mwaniki]

one word for this poem...FLAWLESS! the imagery,the personification,the rhyme...i too saw truth

[J.M]

What a genius poem - i love the repetition and the personification of truth. The imagery was fantastic and it was an inspired idea. Good job!

[M.Babu]

Manze go easy!!!
This was fantastic bro. You're filling up my favourites with your unmatched skill!!
I swear you're the best poet to me bro and these lines you come up with are extremely insanely good. You are chagrining hopefuls as myself...who wish to write as smoothly as you!
I shouldn't quote my favorite lines coz i'll just copy paste it all but if there was a gun to my head i'd say:

" I saw Truth, glimpsed her briefly
Amidst a murky haze
Her face shone with animation
And her eyes were all ablaze.
She was lithe, and fair, and fragile
Her lips were firm and full
She was at once so lovely,
So pure, and terrible.
I saw Truth, glimpsed her briefly
Amidst a swirling shroud
Her face shone with illumination
And cast its rays around.
My heart swelled with emotion,
In my eye glistened a tear
I felt at once elation,
Transport, and joy, and fear."
meaning it was all awesome. #shootme.
Streamlined flow, awesome rhymes, great imagery, fine-tuned subject matter, well phrased. I'm just gonna have to rate this bad boy a 200/100.
GREAT ONE HERE