Shadow

Will my flaws
be the face of me?
Does my past
haunt my future?
If i colour within the lines
will that save me?
When you look at me
what do you see?

Regret is my hunter
You are the sun that
unveils me
exposing me under
your observation
the question leaves its mark
burning through my mind
do you see me or
do you see my shadow?

Author's Note

Please tell me what you think:)

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Very nice use of words and thoughts. I liked this poem. Strong questions were asked. Thank you Tee for sharing the amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote

[Rana]

The sun, comes around, creates shadows, you feel so "seen" and under scrutiny. Yet, perhaps it's merely the shadow it concerns itself with.. Something real and superficial at once.. A unique metaphor. :)

[Alias]

This is excellent! But personally, I think the first stanza has more impact as a stand alone poem - don't be afraid to make it short and sweet.