Life Is Never Fair

Life Is Never Fair

A Poem by TheLostMind
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Walking to the funeral of a person you loved...

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I walk along that crowded lane.
Wondering how long I'll feel the pain.
My broken heart keeps banging against my chest.
Is it time for it to rest??.
Even though I try to leave them behind...
Those memories of her still haunt my mind...
Pale and motionless,she stings my eyes....
She drives me insane, she makes me realize..
Life is never fair, my friend...
Coz all good things are destined to end.....
I thought that she was the one for me...
God wasn't fair in setting her free...
The void left by her can never be filled...
The funeral was hers', but it was my soul that was killed...
Now, against my weak heart I fight...
Wondering what's wrong and what's right...
Your consoling words won't suffice..
They inebriate my brain, they make me realize..
Life is never fair my friend...
Coz all good things are destined to end...
I think of her night and day...
Wondering why God took her away ..
I try to keep my spirit alive...
Its been ripped, left to die...
I feel her pain, I hear her cries..
Shattered, broken, slowly I realize..
Life is always fair, my friend...
Like all broken things, even this will mend..

© 2014 TheLostMind


Author's Note

TheLostMind
Replaced - "Like all ruined things, even this life will end.... " with "Like all broken things, even this will mend..".. There is always hope :) ..

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Thank you for sharing this quite powerful poem. Though I understand and like the replacement of the last line, I am torn because I very much like the flow of the replaced line of: "Like all ruined things, even this life will end...." In any case, thank you.

Posted 9 Years Ago


TheLostMind

9 Years Ago

Thanks Aveira :). At the time of writing, the line was indeed - "Like all ruined things, even this .. read more
Life is never fair, my friend...
Coz all good things are destined to end.....

The sentiment in this really captures the essence of someones demise - its effects on us are far reaching and can make us dwell on the negative but - in the two lines I've quoted you also offer the key to the light beyond - if all good things are destined to end then all things are destined to end; if all things are destined to end then all bad things are equally destined to end - therefore Life is fair in the final analysis. It seems unfair at times - at times when the negative is in the ascendancy - perhaps we need to dwell more about Life being fair when it is.

You stirred my thought-pot this morning TLM. thank you



Posted 9 Years Ago


TheLostMind

9 Years Ago

Thanks for stopping by Anto.. :). " if all good things are destined to end then all things are dest.. read more
ANTO

9 Years Ago

yes - such a fine message of hope but Its message drowned out by the enormity of the rest I felt. YV.. read more
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Gee
Very emotional,the death of a loved one really puts everything perspective.If you get time"put the world on mute and pause" is s poem I've written along similar lines.Enjoyed reading yours very much.

Posted 9 Years Ago


TheLostMind

9 Years Ago

Thank you for stopping by.. I have already read and reviewed "Put the world on mute and pause" :P
Gee

9 Years Ago

Will nip over and read your thoughts.Thanks
"Even though I try to leave them behind...
Those memories of her still haunt my mind...
I thought that she was the one for me...
God wasn't fair in setting her free..." These for lines is exactly how I felt by losing my best friend!
Put tears in my eyes.
I think this has great potential!
(Please read my story called The Blonde Girl. It's about my best friend. I think you would like it a lot.)
Keep up the great work!

C. Lee Battaglia


Posted 9 Years Ago


TheLostMind

9 Years Ago

Thank you :).. I will definitely read your story :)
C. Lee Battaglia

9 Years Ago

Thanks please leave me a review also!
Life is never fair my friend...
Coz all good things are destined to end...
Really true,
I liked it, touching and nicely written.

Posted 9 Years Ago


TheLostMind

9 Years Ago

Thank you :)
I liked this poem for a lot of reasons! The rhyming was good and also I can relate to the idea of how hard it is to get over losing someone

Posted 9 Years Ago


TheLostMind

9 Years Ago

I am glad you could relate to this one :).. Thanks for stopping by.. :)
That was very moving.
Losing someone you love is difficult.

Posted 9 Years Ago


TheLostMind

9 Years Ago

Thanks for stopping by Ana, I really appreciate it:)
Matching Socks

9 Years Ago

You're welcome. :)
I love the change of words at the end of your poem; the way you bring hope into the darkness of this issue.
Thank you for spreading hope and positive vibes.
In help of this poem, one is able to change their way of thinking towards the tragedy of losing a loved person.
Well written! ☺

Posted 9 Years Ago


TheLostMind

9 Years Ago

Thanks ginny...:).. hope keeps us alive.. without hope, there would be no reason to live.. :)
i have experienced a tragic loss. and this writing really reveals the true thoughts and feelings of a person with such an experience. it is beautiful :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


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TheLostMind

9 Years Ago

Thanks lorena.. I am glad you liked it.. :)
Lorena

9 Years Ago

You're welcome :)
I am so sorry about your loss, but without the heartbreak this piece of work would not exist. Which it really is a lovely piece of work. Thank you for sharing.

Posted 9 Years Ago


TheLostMind

9 Years Ago

Thanks for the review Brit :) .. You are right - " without the heartbreak this piece of work would n.. read more

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