The Blind Girl

She comes out of the building and blinks, throws her blond wavy hair over her shoulder and stares at the city in front of her. The man in the black suit next to her looks around as if expecting danger.

She turns to him and says softly, "I didn't know it would be this beautiful."

"This is just the city," he answers.

"When will she be here?" The girl asks as she looks back at the pink sky and the skyscrapers around her.

"Soon," he answers.

At that moment a girl comes around the corner, she had long, blond, wavy hair, dark blue eyes, and the same high cheekbones as the girl on the steps. She walks past them and as soon as she enters the building, two men grab her and she disappears.

The girl smiles and says, "now she will know what it is like to live in darkness. The darkness that I spent my whole life in will now swallow her."

Author's Note

I know there are a few grammar problems, but what do you think of this in general?

Reviews

[C. Rose]

Curious to know where this goes. It is an intriguing start. But so far I don't know what is going on. Is the second girl identical to the first or just similar looking? Is this the main character's first time seeing?

[wordman]

it is the beginning of a great story write on

[Starmountainkid]

I like your story because it leaves much to the imagination, it could be interpreted in different ways. I suppose it could be expanded into a sort of a film noir type of story, but it's interesting just as it is.

I think it's written well, it just says what it needs to say without adding what isn't necessary to convey the idea. Hope you add more stories here.

[NoelHC]

This is short, too short to form a concrete opinion about. However I find I am curious to learn more, what is going on here.
Why are these women being held in the darkness.
Do you plan to expand upon this?
I look forward to that.