Let's Let Us Be

She is there

And I am here

And all we do

Is stare

She says to me

"Let's let us be"

And I can't seem

To fight her

We walk the grass

We pace the paths

We run all through

The fields

And when we're done

We watch the sun

How it shines so 

In her hair

As we fall to sleep

On hills so steep

In a vale that 

Spreads out far

She says once more

Right from her core

"Let's let us be

In love"

Reviews

[Michael G. Smith]

Wow! The natural progression in unvailing to climax of messages was written in perfection. I love the third stanza because of the subtle soft rhyme of grass and path. I'm a word guy and when I read poems like this it makes me happy. As I read it felt as if letters tumbled out of a container and fell onto the space landing in exactly their predestined place.

[TheUnrulyWriter]

Aw thank for this review!! It's so kind :) I'm glad you felt the flow of the poem, it's always important to me that my poems feel like bouncy little streams of water.

[Michael G. Smith]

You are so welcome.

[barleygirl]

I very much enjoyed reading this simple expression that starts with the title phrase seeming to mean one thing, but in the end, it means something different & much more promising. I like the descriptions of being together outdoors, good details, sparking imagination in the reader's mind.

[TheUnrulyWriter]

Thank you for the review! I'm glad you liked the details and imagery :)