"Forgive Me Please; For I Have Brought You Pain"

A Sonnet/Acrostic

Atonement's pain bear immense in Gethsemane;    

the Master knelt down and as He prayed humbly; 

oh, "If thou be willing, remove this cup from me:

never the less not my will, but thine be done." He

enter into agony, praying earnestly.

 

For "Sweat was as it were great drops of blood;" lonely

on this night He endure misery none doth see;
regretfully I have used temptations' journey.    

 

My transgressions lead way for how I be received;  

yet, He offers me forgiveness so readily. 

 

Saying, "thy faith hath made thee whole; go in peace."Sure

intense my heart doth shake. Lure is woe the deceived; 

need I tremble for the wrath of God? Inaptly

souls like mine befallen astray brought forth anguish pure. 

 

 

 

2011 © T.G. Hopkins III

 

 

 

Quotes

"Saying, Father if thou be willing, remove this cup from me: nevertheless not my will, but thine, be done." Luke 22:42

"And being in an agony he prayed more earnestly: and his sweat was as it were drops of blood falling down to the ground." Luke 22:44

"And he said unto her, Daughter be of good comfort: thy faith hath made thee whole; go in peace.  Luke 8:48

 

 

 

Reviews

[Angela]

I don't know where to begin. Definitely my favorite of your writings. In one simple line you convey such emotion and are able to tell a complete story. I am amazed at that. Regretfully, I have used temptations journey. My transgressions lead way for how I be received. Wow. My life in a nutshell. Actually, for me, It is the best poem I have read on here, and I don't say that lightly. Should inaptly have been ineptly or is there a meaning I am ignorant of?

[Poetic Beauty]

You did this wonderfully. You picked really special verses from the bible. I like the details you spun into this.

[MuSe Ampoule]

I found this piece to be extremely profound...a testament of ones faith is only valid through a trial of fires...for who would punish the transgressor more than the transgressor himself.

Contemplative work.

[Onatah]

I absolutely love works like this. One of my favorite poems I've read on here. The picture gives it so much effect, and there is just so much biblical nostalgia while still maintaining originality.

Great work. 100/100