Valley Trail

The paths we take in live often converge with the paths of others

A man walks a trail

It twists and turns

Running through a valley

With many possible directions

 

Only he decides his route to take

Not knowing what lies ahead

Only that which rests behind him

 

His choices are quick

He can’t waste time pondering

Or else the valley will consume him

And he will become lost in the forest

 

He runs and walks along different parts

Not a single piece is ever the same

Only ever slowing to catch his breath

 

If his eyes are open while he moves

He’ll see only a part of the valley

But his movements will decide

Just what his eyes view

 

Each stretch of his course has something new

Be it an obstacle or a moment of beauty

Sometimes others find him

But they seem to leave just as quickly

 

Until a foolish girl appears

And decides to run beside him

Sometimes just ahead or behind

But always there

 

She’ll keep pace when she has to

And give him a push when he needs it

She’ll remind him why he runs

 

And when their journey comes to an end

They’ll have each other wherever they rest

 

 

Reviews

[Divinity Sleeps in This]

The plot and execuation of this was very fine, it felt very natural and I could see it clearly in my mind's eye. It was all such a splendid journey, you are gifted with metaphors.

[Sethnicity]

The subject is very visible and the rythym like marble rye.
work in a little more color and rythum to make this a little more fluid.

[Mathias Winters]

Great description of the roads of life. I also like how the help of the girl comes in at the end, symbolizing romance. (I'm guessing). The man running in the poem seems to be fighting through the roads. The poem creates a great image of this. I loved it.