Handle With Care

Handle With Care

A Poem by Violet Moon
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Another poem about one of the same guys from earlier poems that I wrote quite a few months ago.

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Handle With Care

I just found out

That all the rumors

Are just that.

 

None of the lies are true

And you really do care.

And that you want to hold me close,

And open up your heart to me.

 

In return

My dear love,

I give you a key.

 

This is the key

To my heart.

 

So please

Handle with care.

You have hurt me once

But I’m forgiving you

And letting you back inside.

 

I will not say goodbye

But only until again.

Because you hold the key

And will be allowed in

As long as you handle with care.

© 2010 Violet Moon



Author's Note

Violet Moon
I don't really like the first stanza but ever since I first wrote this I haven't been able how to fix it. If you have any ideas, please let me know. : )

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I actually love the way you use that first stanza. It has a casual tone, as if you're starting off a conversation by saying something which seems to have little importance because of how it's said, but which is actually one of the most important things people can learn: that rumors are just rumors. Even the tone of this first stanza may seem a bit gossipy in being so casual; could this possibly be related to the subject of that stanza, namely, gossip and rumors?

The rest of the poem has some pretty solid rhythm, second stanza especially but I can figure out some of it for the last two too. The only piece of advice I might offer is maybe altering the rhythm on the last two stanzas to make it a bit clearer, but I hesitate even saying that, since I don't really want to tamper.

The message is really straightforward, which I also digg; trust in someone's truth in contrast to belief in gossip and everybody's word, which reminds me really of the whole theme of being 'misunderstood'.

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I actually love the way you use that first stanza. It has a casual tone, as if you're starting off a conversation by saying something which seems to have little importance because of how it's said, but which is actually one of the most important things people can learn: that rumors are just rumors. Even the tone of this first stanza may seem a bit gossipy in being so casual; could this possibly be related to the subject of that stanza, namely, gossip and rumors?

The rest of the poem has some pretty solid rhythm, second stanza especially but I can figure out some of it for the last two too. The only piece of advice I might offer is maybe altering the rhythm on the last two stanzas to make it a bit clearer, but I hesitate even saying that, since I don't really want to tamper.

The message is really straightforward, which I also digg; trust in someone's truth in contrast to belief in gossip and everybody's word, which reminds me really of the whole theme of being 'misunderstood'.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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