City Brush

City Brush

A Poem by Waconda Springs
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The Fewtch

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All the chaos

of a runaway

bus leaping

like a smile over

the green green grass,

like a grin bleeds

ripped silver


The exuberance

of length

almost over

shadowed by sardines

pressed screams under glass


Headlight eyes

bus eyes

your eyes

Lost and thrilling


A plane

losing altitude

somewhere over

DPRK


© 2015 Waconda Springs



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My favorite part in this - "Headlight eyes bus eyes your eyes lost and thrilling." So good, it reminds me of past times.

Posted 2 Years Ago


I like it. Casually profound; the best kind of profound. I get a Bukowski-type nonchalance from your writing that is quite delicious... especially in regards to the heavy-hitting/ironic aspects of the topics you choose to write about. There's also an air of enigma that interestingly balances everything. It's incredibly enjoyable-- not pretentious or heady or stiflingly intellectual & fruity.

My favorite prose: "like a smile over/the green green grass/like a grin bleeds/ripped silver

I'm already a fan. Keep it up!

Posted 2 Years Ago


this is a dream i had. i think i'm still dreaming it.

you're my favorite poet

Posted 2 Years Ago


faryn

2 Years Ago

not the imagery precisely, moreso the feeling it creates is reminiscent of the dream

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Waconda Springs

2 Years Ago

weird man. same dreeeeeeaaaaaaaam. takes a real freak to dreamabout a runawaybus
faryn

2 Years Ago

i have had many vivid dreams of runaway vehicles. my subconscious must love the symbolism.
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Sad one Waconda. Reminds me of a pair of eyes I saw from an WWII imprisonment camp photo.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Your poems are, enigmatic. I liked this one, such chaos, could be love

Posted 2 Years Ago


Waconda Springs

2 Years Ago

Thanks, Marcus. That's what I was going for. I write in broad strokes and stuff, but all I want is.. read more
marcus

2 Years Ago

Yes!, that makes it more powerful
those poor sardines left screaming - no wonder their eyes remain wide open, looking somewhat in shock. Shall we have them on toast then?

this keeps you right there on the page - this is why I am drawn to it - with the end of each stanza I am almost begging for the next - almost sexual in a way ...

I love it - especially with my confusion with the last four letters - well done - awesome XX

Posted 2 Years Ago


Waconda Springs

2 Years Ago

look up them last four.
KWP

2 Years Ago

Ahh ok - but I think I will go with Dangerous Planet Region Krypton / hahah X

Kiddin.. read more
Waconda Springs

2 Years Ago

Same diff. DPRK is totally Dangerous Planet Region Krypton. Goin' for the unknown.
You're writing style is very different, but I love trying to get the meaning out of it. I feel the passion in your words which makes each and every one special and thrilling. Thanks for sharing

Posted 2 Years Ago


Waconda Springs

2 Years Ago

thanks, syd.
you capture that feeling of going down---poetically relaying the inner thoughts of those knowing that their lives are in a silver bird whose wings have been clipped...and the ground is beckoning.

you create suspense with these lines and don't let us down at the end.

kind of an allegory...but then...kind of what it is.

life is a series of crash landings.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Waconda Springs

2 Years Ago

based on an image I had of a bus gone awol, but in an almost cartoon way, wherein the wheels become .. read more
The suspense up until the end was thrilling. In my opinion, the last two stanzas are the highlight of the poem. I love "Headlight eyes, bus eyes, your eyes, lost and thrilling" really beautiful. Then of course the last line, clever. Well done.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Brinleigh Bailey

2 Years Ago

Most writers go through that I don't necessarily know how I feel about it phase in pieces that they .. read more
Waconda Springs

2 Years Ago

Oh, I know it's good ;)
Just not there yet. First drafts are disgusting smears, but you gott.. read more
Brinleigh Bailey

2 Years Ago

Haha, well I hope you get there. :)

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