Iowa Temple

Iowa Temple

A Poem by Waconda Springs
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The Fewtch

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I borrowed a guitar
from the deaf lady's daughter
carried it
on my back felt
the warmth about
the waist of the blonde

Stairs sunk
like rising water
like a sunset backwards
rises
massive spires curves like gold brick rainbows and blues

I saw her
and saw what

I wanted to see

the curves and lace







© 2015 Waconda Springs



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Do not walk away in silence? Love the smash of words - all so wonderfully intrepid. I am glad to have read you this rather quiet night -
Rosie
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Posted 2 Weeks Ago


refreshing write
cool for sure.
the guitar and girls
intertwine into both
as you walk away.

Posted 10 Months Ago


I have read a few of your poems and they all provide a very interesting word choice and content. I like your take on life, reflected in your poems, in general. The writes read kind of different from other poetry but enjoyable.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like this a lot. It's immediately intriguing. The imagery is unique and cool.. Thanks for writing it

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Very nice. So short and sweet but just enough imagery to create all the right pictures in my mind.

Posted 1 Year Ago


The idea of a deaf lady whose daughter plays guitar, music she can never hear.
Choppy flow like the lake on a windy day.
The last four lines are great too.

Posted 1 Year Ago


I love how choppy this is, it makes reading very interesting. The imagery is great (:

Posted 1 Year Ago


Waconda Springs

1 Year Ago

Thanks for the read, S
so i wrote you a big long dialog, about how dicks look bigger on the horizon.

and then the computer crashed and the horizon disappeared.

f**k.

i dig you brad

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Waconda Springs

1 Year Ago

i appreciate the dig/
making dicks look bigger is sort of why the horizon exists.
Whoooooooooaaaaaaa,,brooooo.

Posted 1 Year Ago


loved best stanza two, especially the last line "massive spires curves like gold brick rainbows and blues"
and the visuals the backwards sunset gave, like the sun rising like a phoenix from the waves, very impressive and expressive.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Corset

1 Year Ago

well, we have never been big on punctuation, if it floats our boat we must have vision! I dunno what.. read more
Waconda Springs

1 Year Ago

Yeah, I'm not big on punctuation in poetry. It doesn't need to be there. If E.E Cummings did it, w.. read more
Corset

1 Year Ago

damn straight! whats good for the goose

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Edmonton, Canada



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