Hello, I Stole Your Pencil

Hello, I Stole Your Pencil

A Poem by YouoweYoupay
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I'm so sorry.

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Hello, I Burrowed Stole Your PenciL


I'm so sorry I stole your precious pencil
But there is good news too,
Those curtains of shades of blue
And an illusion of a dragon or two
Made such a lovely dress, who knew!

I wore them after a shower
And ate leftover social awkwardness
With garlic-bread and a touch of cheese

And I wore gentle sarcasm for earrings
And your stolen pencil,
I chained it as a necklace
Round my slightly scarred neck,

Then I ran downstairs
And our ground floor looked funny
Because it wasn't there.

Only a cavity that had swallowed our furniture
Into its black, black belly

So I took your dear old, slightly chewed pencil
And I drew a shoe cabinet
A mirror, and a Persian carpet
 In the entrance hall

And with a few fingers I smudged the charcoal lines
That made the floor tiles,
And I left a memory of the strange grim hole

I threw in your beloved fairy tales
To feed its hungry growl
But you loved many,
Too many fairy tales...

© 2014 YouoweYoupay



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Hey! My pencil! Give it back!
Another poem review, what am I to do? I'm not a poetry guy, but gosh darn it I'll try.
It seems to me that the imagery is splendid. How original that concepts can be worn, logic upended.
What a masterpiece of form, an uncle's niece would find enorm such qualities we deem positively warm.
The ending mysterious, the words left me delirious with images of mutable furniture. Gregarious!
The spelling, the grammar, (both points I like to hammer) were flawless and left my critique absolutely clawless.
Look what you did! Look what you made me do, Rain! I literally waxed poetic over your poem! Argh! I give it 6 out of 5!

Posted 3 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Eric Pudalov

3 Years Ago

WOW! I love the poetic reviews - I was about to write one, and then I thought "How can I write some.. read more



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Especially like the sinister touch...

Posted 2 Years Ago


IF this is what you do with a pencil lets find out just how creative you can be with colored pens.

Posted 3 Years Ago


This piece is imaginatively complex and utterly insane, much like you'd get with a child drawing a picture... Children have an amazing quality of keeping their imagination on 'full-open', where everything literally pours out along with the kitchen sink. That's what this piece reminds me of. A child's description of their drawing...or maybe a child's story of what they drew. Very, very good.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Well, Rain, this is an amazingly dark and beautiful poem. As I'd responded to Ninja below, I'm not sure I have anything particularly poetic to say.

I found the poem very touching, especially the "Only a cavity that had swallowed our furniture/Into its black, black belly" part. It made me think that there was some real-life disaster or some feelings deep within you that were the inspiration behind this.

Though I may not be experiencing the same things that you are, I know that we all have an inner "black, black belly" that hides some of our deepest emotions and experiences. I think that's where the greatest poetry comes from, and I think you've composed one of those here.

Posted 3 Years Ago


This agreat mysterious piece of poetry, I am really impressed. Thanks for sharing. The Elusive Mr Dunne.

Posted 3 Years Ago


I loved the ending. I understood somehow what you were going through writing this poem.
I really liked at the end '' I threw in your beloved fairy tales, to feed its hungry growl, but you loved many, too many fairy tales ... ''
really good always liked your way of writing. ^_^

Posted 3 Years Ago


Flow was great and it painted a picture with words. As a poet, you really can't ask for me! Great read and yes, steal more pencils.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Very interesting and mysterious. I feel like there's a really deep, hidden meaning here. It intrigues me. Well done! I really enjoyed it!

Posted 3 Years Ago


Hey! My pencil! Give it back!
Another poem review, what am I to do? I'm not a poetry guy, but gosh darn it I'll try.
It seems to me that the imagery is splendid. How original that concepts can be worn, logic upended.
What a masterpiece of form, an uncle's niece would find enorm such qualities we deem positively warm.
The ending mysterious, the words left me delirious with images of mutable furniture. Gregarious!
The spelling, the grammar, (both points I like to hammer) were flawless and left my critique absolutely clawless.
Look what you did! Look what you made me do, Rain! I literally waxed poetic over your poem! Argh! I give it 6 out of 5!

Posted 3 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Eric Pudalov

3 Years Ago

WOW! I love the poetic reviews - I was about to write one, and then I thought "How can I write some.. read more
Many nice uses for the pencil. I enjoyed your thoughts on the uses of the pencil. A nice ending to the excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 3 Years Ago



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