The Floating Iris

The Floating Iris

A Poem by Whales

She's like an accordion
Frightened smile
Broken eyes
In need of laughter 

She gambols in the falling leaves
As they silently brush there way through her soft hair
Twirling around in her patterned sweater
Feeling the wind through her finger tips
Tasting the everlasting beauty of the brisk air.

Then, as we sing in the garden
Gazing at the twilight 
Teeth filled with everything but sorrow
We shout out our fears
As we cavort and frolic through our lives
Through the falling trees
And through the broken and withered leaves
We step


© 2012 Whales



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different than your usual, but nice

and relaxing

Posted 4 Years Ago


I liked the leafy image to this. It seemed such a generosity of autumn just in the line: "she gambols in the falling leaves" (which has me wondering about your picture of kangaroos in the outback?? It seems so incongruous. But, I digress...)
Whales, thanks for sharing. I like your title; "The Floating Iris" I think it's clever. Broken eyes seems an awkward poeticism, but I'm trying... And in the third stanza I have you shouting down your fears, instead of shouting out.
On the whole, I like this poem. I like the evocation.
Well done!


Posted 4 Years Ago


that is a wonderful first stanza--brilliant metaphor.

Posted 4 Years Ago


I love! welldone..sweet poem this is

Posted 4 Years Ago


Love the way how you started the poem!
It's a very beautiful piece, the imagery is captivating and very descriptive
Great job!

Posted 4 Years Ago



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Whales

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