Crossed Fingers

Crossed Fingers

A Poem by Project Mayhem
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This is about when you're so deep in depression that it becomes an addiction

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I'm turning back outside away from you
Just a rapid infinite loop of walls again
And I know that it's true it's hard for anyone
Still it's tempting and elating and you're still apart

Falling down and hear it voice to me
You are long and gone and can't redeem
I can finally believe that it hits me like a train

Crossed fingers, hoping I can bleed my hands with me
Crossing lies, it is just my high 
Shallow eye, it's the strive that makes me helpless
Slowly sane, I am dead inside




© 2015 Project Mayhem



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Wow! So sad, depression is unbelievable and so destructive.
My mom deals with it and it eats her from the inside out. Great write!
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

Posted 2 Years Ago


There is some great work here. Perhaps it is just the lack of punctuation (commas and periods), but the beauty got me to the end, not the story, and that was disappointing for me. I want to have just a hint of understanding, to sympathize with the narrator of this piece. Perhaps that isn't the point of your piece. Perhaps this would only be properly understood by the person the narrator is talking to, but in that case I think the reader needs more structure to follow; again, perhaps it's the missing punctuation that does it to me. It's going on something wonderful, but I don't think it's quite there yet.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Project Mayhem

2 Years Ago

I wrote this when I was in class and I did try too hard. I usually toss some of these later on if I .. read more
Rana Adalwolfa Simon

2 Years Ago

I try to keep a scraps pile or folder around. I make is a writing exercise to grab an old piece and .. read more

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Added on February 24, 2015
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Project Mayhem
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I write music and lyrics and some my poems are prototypes for the songs I want to write. Some poems are short and sometimes vague but, I've always liked songs/poems that are dense and vague where it m.. more..

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