Where the Grass Is Greener

For the Friday Fictioneers picture prompt

All that separated the four men from a hoard of scantily-clad women was a tall picket fence.

One by one they peeked over, taking in the various... sights.

Roger swallowed hard, reaching up to clutch tightly at his cap. Joey gaped, nearly falling from his bike. Jimmy's stockings curled and uncurled themselves as they, too, could no longer contain their emotion. Even Arnold, the voice of reason, couldn't help but stare.

"That's it," Jimmy breathed, "I'm going in there!"

"No," Roger cried, "don't!"

But it was no use, as Jimmy hoisted himself up, and tumbled head first over the fence...

Reviews

[emipoemi]

You have a good knack of painting a good story without the use of the entirety of the thousand word expression. You really allow for the imagination to take charge and paint the rest of the story for us. Absolutely spectacular. Well done!

[Caroline Hart]

Nice piece of descriptive writing, only wish there was more to read! But I guess it allows the reader to use their imagination. :)

[❀ Gabriela ❀]

Thank you!! Maybe one day I'll add more to this, though I do like the idea of leaving the reader to decide what happens next :D

[fwvalidus]

Simple, light-hearted, and comical. You paint a nice scene with just a few descriptive sentences that balance well and piece together a good picture.

Although it's not truly a story in a structural sense, it's a good little bit of writing that I quite liked. Good job.

[❀ Gabriela ❀]

So sorry for the late reply- I just saw your review, and I wanted to say thank you for the kind words! I'm glad you enjoyed reading this :)

[Wild Spirit]

I like the ending. It is good but not my favorite of your writing. It is still great though

[New Theory]

Good ending :). The reader is left to imagine what happened next.

[❀ Gabriela ❀]

Thank you! :)

[New Theory]

you are welcome :)

[SpeedyHobbit Armstrong]

Nice ending! You leave a lot to reader imagination

[❀ Gabriela ❀]

Thank you! :D

[Eugenia]

Nice work here!

I really like the humor in your writing!

[❀ Gabriela ❀]

Thanks so much :)

[nseddy]

Haha this is funny well done:)

[❀ Gabriela ❀]

Thank you :D glad you enjoyed it! :)