I would if I could

I would if I could , burn all the money on earth
and dance a victory dance around the flames,
my mind , full to the brim , with joy and mirth ,
to be rid of the reason for man's evil games.

 

But then ?? What will happen then ?

Author's Note

I will try to explain a concept that I believe ... and I will do that part by part ..

The second paragraph will be coming up shortly , I will post this paragraph by paragraph to see the reactions at each step ....

Be honest with your views .. while reviewing , do not consider the rhythm or rhyme , I want your thoughts on this matter . If you think I am insane , bluntly say it , no need to sugarcoat ... same goes for all the other views ... abuses allowed .

I would also request readers to spread this write to your friends in the cafe , I need as many views as possible because this is also a kind of survery that I am doing for a write on a much bigger topic ... thanks in advance for your help .

Reviews

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. ha ha ! ... this is awesome ! ... the economics of existence is not my strong point ... so, i don't know how it would be without money ... em and i are constantly trying to strategize about the equitable distribution of wealth through the optimum utilization of the fundamental rights guaranteed by the constitution of india ... we're more like attendants in a casualty ward ... you're into medical research ... good luck and i'll keep an eye out for the radical transformation that you bring about ... a r rahman once said "dream of the stars and you'll land on the roof at least" ... dream big, dear poet ... way to go ... :) ...

[Lily Mae]

I had the funniest picture enter my head at the end.. I pictured them all looking at each other and picking up and throwing rocks. No matter what we take away, I'm afraid they'd still seek out and find something to make them supreme. I love this write, short but large in getting the reader to think :) x

[Tate Morgan]

Oh what i wouldnt give to have some of the money i threw away as a youth

[freelancejouster]

a world without money, i could go for that. i'll assist you in the burning. i don't understand why you would draw out the poem by going paragraph by paragraph. but to each his own. you leave me wonting, if that's what you're going for.

Yes ... I have thought about that , in fact one of the draft paragraphs starts with :

I would if I could , then stop all country mints ...

I agree with you 100% that there are multiple causes of evil , this poem is about one of those reasons that is MONEY .

Thank you Pheasant :)

[pheasant]

i agree with the sentiment behind it, but they may just print another stack. the reason's for the "evil" may lie elsewhere... perhaps more deeper in the roots may be a desire for power and control over others for selfish gains or cravings. i would think the questions would have to be addressed as to what kind of other system to replace it with... this would take a little more forethought.

makes for a good discussion... after all if we want things to change it is a fine idea to open up discussion within a think-tank such as this

looking forward to the sequel/s...